Yo im fighting for my salvation I don't care if your white, black , spanish or haitian this is gods nation//
coming to embrace this hipocritcal race//
god is coming soon I don't care if you like it if you don't believe call a psychic//
I don't care if you even like me my rhymes stick to you like a vian on I.V.//
sin is lurcking in every coner just like a malt licker store in every hotel coner//
I found peace in god he can do for you what he did for me gave me happeniss and hope unlike john the dead pope//
out there is alot of flase advertisement open yours eyes to the truth.. open a connection don't be worried about your skin complection//
its to change time to rearrange//
he changed my life he changed my ways god has giving me better days//
he can help you in so many ways that you cant even dream about in your possible days//
all he wants is the best for us and all it seems we know how to do is fuss//
give him a chance he will show you the light give him a chance don't put up a fight//
im close to heaven im right on track lord help me and rip satan off my back//
ripin mic gripen tight holy lord give me light//
stay on track and hold your head up long, are days of living are not very long//
nartural disasters dam demon bastrads//
god is are saveur so lets watch are behavior//
prophecies and dreams are coming ture just one step closer in the wild roller coaster//
let his death not go for granted lets change are lives the way god planed it//

Feedback would be nice.

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=191945

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ok.. my bad did I do it right now?

lmfao. whoa stucture is weak vocabulary is decent. screw the // that makes you seem herbish emotion needs work imageyr is off a little flow is decent could be better but ya rhyme scheme is horrible but keep practing and elevating. 1

rtf links in the sig.

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allright thanks for your input.

liked the words, but structure is a lil messed up though. also I didn't like the fact that you talked about being Christian and reppin God, but cussed at the end, thats pretty hypocritical to me. keep it up though

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What do you mean by rippin on god? Bad words will come out my mouth im not prefect im just another sinner trying to make it.

liked it... Good creativitybut u gotta up your structure so it gets mo flo.... good topic
good vocab although it didn't rhymed at all.....
RTF!!!!! on my link on my sig...

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