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02-22-06, 10:21 PM | #1 | |||||||
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my lerics are twisted physically get you lifted
IP: 85BE FE9C
my lerics are twisted physically get you lifted
discriptive and captivates you activates and inflates you into rubber im a dimond cuttter the mear thought makes you shutter just as every other being had another mother feeding wrist are bleeding is this all the pain that im fealling waiting for his internal healing nomore living life of crime busting and stealing cussining and killing my verses are cold they leave your bones chilling your dome spilling my souls building ready to burn demons constintine dont' know what i seen falling into a dream of lights and flashing color dashing towards my borther wounds the size of a gutter your words mutter bitch you can't hear did i studder naw i spoke clearly my life i hold dearly even god fears me poltergist stear me into the miror reaching for a tv yelling on the cb ah someone help noone can hear you your down here bye yourself creep around the corner attacking outta stealth your retired hang your head on the shelf goverment collecting from poor ppl to increase they wealth fucking wit me is bad for you health gaurd your dome ak 47 attacking your home your dawg feeding off your bone maybe next time there will be a change in your tone now it's time for the real king to take the throne heaven hell and mirrors iv'e romed chorus: my lerics are twisted physically get you lifted rocking wit my hat and my gucci got me fitted on this mic i have shitted on your lerics i have spitted it's been over the game holder i break ice like a cold shoulder everyday life gets better men are mice looking for chetter in the coldest weather i wear a pussy sweater a go getter i never stop hot drop looking for the hot spot that i rock in one shot explode a nut clot deep in the g spot as time rots i keep searching & keep lerking for another bird pirching on my shoulder another one that i sold her feels like everyday im getting older some x file shit like scully and molder fully withold her from the truth her dad died as a soldier cry on my shoulder he never lost his compolsier as he saved 1 hundred and 50 innacent civilians men wife and there children in his life he mad a killin but he's insane like sudam husain but try to refrain from blood spillin iraq an't a country i'ts where terorist livin and givin secret information of frequent intemtations i get pussy you stuck masterbating contemplating on what i'll do next torching them witches witch try to throw hex on me cop back and blast ant me say thats the last of me thats a blastphamy i ain't gone fall like a tower i stand tall give cowards a glass jaw to match they brass balls wit blood splatterd craft walls sell tickets at class brawls to get fast brauds wit ass yaw im serious keep talking shit youll be delerious how i get pussy i guess you curious your stuck to your hand that makes you furious it's easy like mac and cheese 5 minute recipe 5 little steps indeed wash your hands, take a shower, smoke plenty of weed, go to the strip and spend a 20 g thats how i get pussy on the daly see if it was up to me my dicks big from hanging off the family tree it's not cuz ive been givted lerically ive been twisted physically gets you lifted my imagery might be crappy but hang on to the music and shake that laffy taffy |
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02-22-06, 10:28 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: 85BE FE9C
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02-22-06, 10:32 PM | #3 | |||||||
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02-22-06, 11:55 PM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: 85BE FE9C
uppin.uppin....uppin..... for feed back don't sleep on this yaw comone hit me with some feedaddy up
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02-23-06, 07:44 AM | #5 | |||||
Black Poet
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IP: 860D ECBB
Sup this was pretty impressive,.. your structure was pretty messy !
leading to you bars being stretched ! and at times your flow was pretty basic and predictable. But past all that was a very decent drop, rewrite this song, take out bits that don't need to be there and this could be really good. Nice drop stay up S 1~ |
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02-26-06, 06:32 AM | #6 | |||||||
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IP: 61D6 C2FB
my lerics are twisted physically get you lifted
discriptive and captivates you activates and inflates you into rubbera dimond cuttter mear thought makes you shutter just as every other being had another mother feeding wrist are bleeding is this all the pain that im fealling waiting for this internal healing nomore living life of crime busting and stealing cussining and killing verses so cold they leave your bones chilling your dome spilling my souls building ready to burn demons constintine with no chance of return falling into a dream of lights and flashing color dashing towards my borther wounds size of a gutter your words mutter bitch you can't hear me did i studder naw i spoke clearly my life i hold dearly even god fears me poltergist stear me into the miror reaching for a tv yelling on the cb ah someone help noone can hear me down here bye myself creep around the corner attacking outta stealth your retired hang your head on the shelf goverment collecting from poor ppl to increase they wealth fucking wit me is bad for you health gaurd your dome ak 47 attacking your home your dawg feeding off your bone next time there will be a change in your tone now it's time for the real king to tend ta the throne heaven hell and mirrors iv'e romed chorus: my lerics are twisted physically get you lifted rocking wit my hat and my gucci got me fitted on this mic i have shitted on your lerics i have spitted it's been over the game holder i break ice like a cold shoulder everyday life gets better men and mice searching for chetter in the coldest weather i wear a pussy sweater a go getter i never stop hot drop looking for the hot spot that i rock in one shot explode a nut deep up in the g spot as time rots i keep searching & keep lerking for another bird pirching on my shoulder another one that i sold her feels like everyday im getting older some x file shit like scully and molder fully withold her from the truth her dad died as a soldier cry on my shoulder he never lost his compolsier he saved 1 hundred and 50 innacent civilians men wife and there children in his life he mad a killin but he's insane like sudam husain but try to refrain from blood spillin iraq an't a country i'ts where terorist livin and givin secret information of frequent intemtations i get pussy you stuck masterbating contemplating on what i'll do next torching them witches witch try to throw hex on me cop back and blast at me say thats the last of me thats a blastphamy i ain't gone fall like a tower i stand tall give cowards a glass jaw to match they brass balls wit blood splatterd craft walls sell tickets at class brawls to get fast brauds wit ass yaw im serious keep talking shit youll be delerious how i get pussy i guess you curious your stuck to your hand that makes you furious it's easy like mac and cheese 5 minute recipe 5 little steps indeed wash your hands, take a shower, smoke plenty of weed, head to the strip and spend a 20 on some henisey as the corks popping regularly if it was up to me i'd get it easily dicks big because it was hanging off the family tree it's not cuz ive been givted lerically ive been twisted physically gets you lifted my imagery might be crappy i slap girls ass fastly & make it wabble like a laffy taffy |
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02-26-06, 06:33 AM | #7 | |||||||
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IP: 61D6 C2FB
there yaw i switched it up and cut some stuff outta it well hit me up don't sleep on this yaww hit me up uppin..................... uppin......................uppin............
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02-26-06, 12:49 PM | #8 | ||||
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IP: F154 0779
that was pretty ill, but i think the chorus doesnt quite match the subject of the verses, and the parts were u talk about getting pussy and such is kindoff going off topic.......put those in a diff song or somthing.....
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02-26-06, 02:57 PM | #9 | |||
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IP: 3240 794D
? This wasn't "Ill" or "Pretty Good", it was just completely unpolished and very amaturish. You have no direction to your content and the structure alone is going to turn away most any reader who conciders checking this out. Some of this was boast and some you tried to go deep, but you've really got to jsut pick one because the two don't flow well together. And, you had spelling errors and stuff, just tryn' run a check and do some proof reads before you post next time.
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02-26-06, 03:09 PM | #10 | ||||
Sam Dope
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IP: C147 32A9
You fucking spelled 'lyrics' with an 'e'. You're an idiot man...
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02-26-06, 04:34 PM | #11 | ||||||
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IP: DE77 123E
this was good.......structure was hard to read at points cuz no commas and shit but anyway likin these parts
from blood spillin iraq an't a country i'ts where terorist livin and givin secret information of frequent intemtations i get pussy you stuck masterbating contemplating on what i'll do next torching them witches witch try to throw hex on me cop back and blast at me say thats the last of me thats a blastphamy i ain't gone fall like a tower i stand tall give cowards a glass jaw to match they brass balls wit blood splatterd craft walls ^^^^^^^^^dope good shit brother keep dropping.........fuckin 7/10 |
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02-26-06, 10:32 PM | #12 | |||||||
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IP: 61D6 C2FB
thanx man good looking and thanx all for the positive and the negative just looking to get better but for yaw haters which i only seen one at this point' how can you say i sucked if you don't know how i would spit this to a beat so you need to understand that to im use to spitting to a beat i don't use beats when i write on here but good looking uppin.,..........uppin...............uppin........ ......uppin,,,,,,,,,,,,,uppin........
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