AYo man WERD check it man and FEED On this.............


ayo slowly checkin bitchez man off the meter
have ya ass clogged drain ya blood in a 2. liter
bitchez start steppin i merk them before they reach
niggas start takin a seat fools i got a lesson to teach
messin up keep goin cus u learn from your mistakes
then ya start to notice ya start rockin niggas makin quakes
see its a mission that i spit and homie its a must
niggas keep talkin shit grab my glock, cock back and bust
trust i keep it real and legit and fukin realistic
hope bitches feel it comin strong u want it u can keep it!
tryin to make it simple nigga test my imaginary
it aint scary but trust i leave bitchez in missionary
position to strike and kill assinate any bitchez on the field
nigga i leave marks to show proof people gots ta feel
honest rapper wit an ill vocab i do wat i gots to kill
post up my talent cuz ima showcase my verball skillz
u slow to reactiom got time to set the satchel
attached wit C4's that'll have ya ass dismantled
niggas keep talkin nigga i will still turn up and blast
come step even closer nigga ill dicapitate ya ass
bitch check my record i dont care im still ill and legit
have bitchez on the streetz calimin me that im the shit
turn the scriptz shit ive filled half the damn pages
nigga ill rip ya ass burn ya soul i must be ill contagious
so stop wonderin if i gots skillz homie i do fasho
man in real life homie 85-10 the name is sho(for shodown)


holla at me peeps...............

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Aight,

this is ya typical brag and boast piece I suppose. The flow was the best aspect in your verse I think, had some multis, good pace to the entire piece and such. The vocab might be upped a little because you used "bitch" and "nigga" a lot, after a while it got annoying ya feel me? So try to switch it up next time. Had some nice lines in there, good braggin and shit.

Solid work

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erm....this woz jus like she sed^ but i think the vocab was good but u shud have used diffrent vocabs great flow good concepts good lines overall 7/10

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OYD MAFIA

this was iight man nothing special but deffinitley elevated.....keep it up keep postin 1

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