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Old 06-11-05, 01:43 PM   #1
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life lesson in pain....

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u know about suffering when u almost lose ya brother in a crash
i found that out the hard way.... then vision my child-hood in a flash
the shit is sad, but it only get worst as i lost my right hand
was on my way to NYC.. then got a call they just shot up my BEST-MAN
matter of fact my brother.....different blood type but still attach in the heart
one black the other spanish, mad he dumb-out when he was smart as fuck
the shit depressin got me stressin life lesson, wounder'in when is it my turn
when the pain gonna stop or is it gonna keep going till my brains burn
shit.... i gotta breath right now for a sec...... its like i gotta talk to u
cuz my grandmoms passed on the emergency bed.....................
N my aunty passed away next..... while giving birth in the hospitol
ITS LIKE GOD.. why u take the good-hearted and leave the evil
then i gotta go to church to pray to u, when i rather see my dead-people

life a lasson, cuz happyness only leads to depression
aint much time for 2ed guess'in, life dieing by the seconed
so dont bother with the stress and
u'll be good learning about the life lesson.....

i will have a part 2 to this but for now i wanna see how ya thought this is going so far???

any good feed back??
bad feed back i take it all holla...
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Old 06-11-05, 06:54 PM   #2
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upp'in..............
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Old 06-11-05, 06:58 PM   #3
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daym
i was feelin this
sum of the rhymin cood improve, nuetralise bar sizes n up vocab
but this drop was cool, real deep man good job
story was wow...

"N my aunty passed away next..... while giving birth in the hospitol
ITS LIKE GOD.. why u take the good-hearted and leave the evil
then i gotta go to church to pray to u, when i rather see my dead-people "
nice lines^^

feel 4 u bro
keep this up
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Old 06-12-05, 10:24 AM   #4
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thanks for the feed back mang holla................
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Old 06-12-05, 11:16 AM   #5
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''it only gets worse as i lost my right hand''...word dup dawg, how u gonna jack off without it?

im playing, diz wuz good, nyce emotion bought thru yo' rhymes, wordplay wuz good 2, deep hood gutter peice, really feelin it dawg. wuz it a true story? bout ya grandma & da other rhymes, & yo hit me up 4 part 2, i'll feature on diz wit'chu, good job dawg, 7.5/10
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Old 06-12-05, 11:23 AM   #6
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yea fam everything i spit on this is 100% fatcs of life that hurts me fam word

i figuer since ghost ask me to do daily suffering i would spit facts cuz he ask me to cuz it sounds better insted of bull-shit lies u try to make people believe........

part 2 is gonna be hot cuz i have a family problem right now my other aunt in the hospitol N i want to tell a story how i almost passed away a couple times... * stab N i've been shot at but from preety far about 2 blocks no-one was hit but i got mad shit to put down by the time im really finish with this im just trying to figuer out how to shorten it thats all...

i will holla at u for part 2 fam word-up holla
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