beauty caressed, destined flesh and knowing care
shivered nights refreshed memories, yet lacking a stare
the pupils black;the onyx lenses prevented sight
unwanted nerves were demolished, depriving my light
"what do i do?" fearsome lashes sting the retina
colors were seen through eyelids, light was set in her
gods special gift unwrapped fued, an optical virus
invited romance, desired love connected to dim iris
self reflection was beauty, yet her oculus demented
temporarry was now permanent, seriving a life sentence
angels flew with grace, shadow light formed a mental haze
rapid colors stun the fate, but a dream only ablaze
attatched skin, dimmed the chances of a peering shine
extravigant rainbows paint my mind, revealing light of lime
true loved blocked by a mental cellar, glassed in a ball
mate dealt with the seized sight, ignoring the fault
cased relationship, fasten locked lips zipped to tight
an optical illusion directed flesh, no love at first sight
attachment made, blind queen for many, but beauty to him
no matter the consequnces, living with a women too dim
one's pupils burn the flames of destiny, others fail to bring
a satisfactory relationship, the oculus dementation sings
sleep seems a stand, closing pupils in the deep sleep
a mountain of hope for cureing, is a mountain to steep
acceptance of dementence, an option for suicide stands
but a loving mate for connection, never seems to unban
severed love is sewed together, caring pupils chose to love
and deal with lifes gifts, hailing towards us from above

I am Squidz aka Kost from RB, so dont think i bit, im dropping everything here

Pz

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Not a bad peice dude, needa work on multi syllable rhyming and it was hard to tell where the verse was leading at some points, but I guess it had the imagry stuff and all that that topicals have.

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Aint Dat Ryte Love Is Blind As Hell..i liked it but theres room for improvement still...keep dropping and working at it...good drop tho cuzz i enjoyed it

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