Talking: Once again Inter droppin hot drops and Messenger ever showing us how to do it right.....Inter and Messenger we so hot

Verse One: Intermental:

I got an up north dick goin into this down south chick,
East to west, all I hear is "Inter"....................the best,
Multis comin all over the place, right into your face,
Im Multi-national haha, make rap a country, im the capital,
This the outro, Inter flows like water in........hydro,
Electrical flows, wordplay like a jigsaw, I say what I saw
And I saw in my mind im the best, so im sayin it now, im the best
Inicdentaly, "inter" enter peoples mind "mentally", makin wack emcees "history"
Its written down in the future bible, but they keep changin it makin it not liable
Im the sickest with flows as I enter these hoes,
Excellence excells in my presecese, im the tru meanin of "rap in its essence"

Verse Two: The Messenger:

Im Multi-tastic, coming to hit you up quick and drastick,
all these fake MC's are out lasted, time to retire and be outcasted,
Mc's spitting veres left and right when they don't even know how to fully grab the mic,
yo im elevating like escalades, but I refuse to run with renegades
becuase they cruise with grandes and switchblades that end days,
the power of this mic, when me and it units ignights to extended hights,
I give night frights to gays and dikes, I don't accept it it's just not right,
ignorance is bliss, if you consider it I will dismiss, that is true bliss,
Mr.Multi all time high, please don't push my buttuns I have a limmit and unlike you,
im not a gimmick, only real talk here spitting the turth, lighting up the roof,
I have have a storie to tell and by the time im done ill be dead or in hell...

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Right both of you spittin hot like fire in this one.
Both of you surpassed yourselves in these verses. although i thought messenger's verse had more of a message to it than intermentals which had more of a self glorification theme to it. But you both came strong with your flows.
you two should collaborate again for real.

Peace

intermental:
your lines were uneven (you shouldn't need '...'s to make the bars even, you switched subjects pretty often, a few of the lines were redundant and irrelevant like "Inicdentaly, "inter" enter peoples mind "mentally", makin wack emcees "history" < first, if something enters your mind, it's already mental and second, beating emcees doesn't have anything to do w/ ppl thinking about you. There wasn't much wordplay and the vocab could be improved, too. On the positive, i liked the 'rap capital' line. I would rate it overall a 3/10.


messenger:
nice sentance structure, i like how you phrased things, it was easy to read, multis were good and abundant, try to avoid using the same word in the same sentance "ignorance is bliss, if you consider it I will dismiss, that is true bliss" i think that's the only time, though. It was a little boring 2 read and wordplay and metas weren't that great. Vocab and complexity can use upping, too. Overall, I would rate it a 4/10

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i liked this, Intermentals line was a lil weak, but Messengers line made up for it, you both did a good job in my book, keep it up

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Both of ya'll did good, feelin Inter's piece was alright, a little choppy but alright to read, 6/10.Messenger did good also, used better vocabulary and structure, 7/10. Overall bout a 6.5, good collab tho.

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