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07-31-05, 05:03 AM
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~*Again*~ 2nd R&B song
IP: 93A9 B1A4
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Never thought of my one and only girl, being gone I was so dumb to have let her heart down so hard Hurts me when she beats herself up cuz she was with me I was so stupid and I’m ashamed of myself completely {Chorus Opening} I’ll never find the thing I’ve lost so badly ever again For what I’ve done, so horrible, can’t call me a lovable man {Chorus x2} It’s hard to carry on with all this regret being alone again I put it on myself when I’m the one all girls can’t stand She is gone and will never ever come back, can’t blame her But here I am again like before played out like a player {Verse 2} I’ve interrupted our relationship with this stupid mistake All of my true feelings for I know I threw them out Hurting her so deeply is the worst thing I could ever do So desperate to call her up and say “baby I miss you” Being kissed but I was not kissing her back I wish we could resolve this shit and be together again {Chorus Opening} I’ll never find the thing I’ve lost so badly ever again For what I’ve done, so horrible, can’t call me a lovable man {Chorus x2} It’s hard to carry on with all this regret being alone again I put it on myself when I’m the one all girls can’t stand She is gone and will never ever come back, can’t blame her But here I am again like before played out like a player
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07-31-05, 05:07 AM
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IP: 93A9 B1A4
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08-01-05, 02:36 PM
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IP: 0FCC B386
yo uppin this one more time.
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08-01-05, 02:39 PM
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
Damn another one ... nice job macca... i was really feeling this ..you had some nice structurte..good wordplay and vocab usuage... your feeling's and emotions were there ..lacked alittle but it really was good.. your imagery was on point..you really gave the reader a clear imaige of what you were talking about... keep it up macca
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08-01-05, 02:41 PM
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IP: 3E7E 9BDA
Content was goood and all.Os was structure.But drop that basic rhyme scheme...I don't like that.But you say it's a R&B song in title...so I guess it's DOpe
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08-01-05, 02:45 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
I'd really like to hear some audio R&B.I'm feelin' this one.Words were nice to me.
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08-01-05, 02:46 PM
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IP: 0FCC B386
thanx. both of you.
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08-02-05, 12:52 AM
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IP: 4097 B39D
yeah uppin.....
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08-04-05, 09:24 AM
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IP: 8A05 210E
fa sho sum good shit i figured it would b good since most r&b talk bout luv situations keep writing i c ya potential coming very soon
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08-04-05, 09:42 AM
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IP: B45D DF1B
thanx. now may I have more
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08-04-05, 11:00 AM
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IP: 3240 794D
this right heurr was a tight piece, good emotion good imagery ur vocab was used approprietly good rhyme scheme and word play i felt ya emotion like whoa man.....7/10 keep it up and rtf on my o/m in my sig
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08-04-05, 11:57 AM
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IP: 2E7A 4723
thanx yo. uppin for more. I'll peep
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