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08-08-05, 12:28 PM | #1 | |||||||
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off an on/ not a commin bond
IP: 995C FBA1
u never loved me .....an i never loved u
but id always come back 2 u but 4 wat your just a mut a whore, a slut........ sometimes i wondered why id hold on 4 so long ive even cryed over u ,...........but i was wrong bout u if somethin bad were 2 happin u be tha 1 laughtin ............................... now ive got nothin 2 loose because of u...u talkin shit makes me confused,......so watch u gonna do thats wat i thought,.,.....just when u think your hot your not every line i bust,........gives me tha courage ta never stop....... just as long as your still breathin...... ima hold on stong 2 wat ive got just 2 hear u screaming........... i wasnt tha only 1 cheatin....... sorry sweat tits u didnt mean shit but dont worry baby your gonna die quick my visions of u were always blurry u made me sick............. by tha time u reach thirty nothins gonna fit......ha ha ...? u self conceded bitch a heart can be broken even swollen .......... it can hurt so much its like ya chokeing every word i write is another door open but u can never understand it u took away a big piece of my life success aint easy when your trapted i give it my best...........' call it shit but watch ya back,...... shit if i died today would it matter......... not enough tears 2 cry when u feel ya life movin faster... hight speed, no exceptions 1 eye open just 2 see watchya gettin i dont wanna lie 2 u anymore all this hurt an pain ive caused is even worse than before ive tryed 2 let it go ,........but there's no where 4 me 2 hide anymore some of us will never change ,..... when love turns 2 lust u think you've got game but u were tha only 1..... 2 blame thanks 2 u im screwed but wats cassy gonna do when she growe up an she askes me wat happened 2 mommy an u ima tell her tha truth,........... money was an issue 2 u... your life was so bad,....... an i made u so mad .......... i hated ya mother ,.... an she didnt see eye 2 eye wit your dad,... CB83 ,.................life aint easy .......believe me i dont care to be credited by any 1 who dont understand'
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08-08-05, 05:01 PM | #2 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 3240 794D
One thing you must work on.......Structure...it was hard to grasp a real flow on this when ur structure was shit...no hate though....felt the emotion good concept....but u really lacked vocab man......gutta up on that for real good rhyme scheme felt that a lot good story tellin...RTF on my open mics or possible battle....1
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