This will feature as my intro.....for the album...tell me if you like it...its freestyle btw...

http://www.soundclick.com/intermental

FORGIVE ME

no editin shit cos I dont know how ill leave lyrics too

Layin on the floor, bleadin, pleadin, Lord what did I do this for?
Why am I intrigued by the life of greed, Lord please open the door,
Two bullets treasured deep into my anatomy, death has gotten to me,
Why did I turn my head to the street, Lord help me land on my feet,
Maybe because my mama died on the day I was born, cry me a river,
Maybe because I didnt have a father figure so I picked up the trigger,
But wheres that gotten me, to a mufuckin near death experience,
Lord I know you listen, so Lord, please tell me that youre hearin us,
Lord please show me a sign, give me another chance at life,
Lord please give me more time, Lord let me make it rite,
On the streets im a real hard nigga, but thats jus the exterior
I feel soft inside, because of my life, I feel so damn deprived
Lord let me open my eyes, to a new lite, blind my eyes with hope,
Im not ready to die, put my gun aside, stop sellin the dope,
But then I realise, the way Im livin can never be deminished,
Cos forever Ill need a Bulletproof Vest, Lord am I finnished?

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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=204233

the other one is comin

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aight, rtf ... good beat choice, ya mic seems like tha volume is too high tho, seem like u havent been practicing too long, but a real vibe to you, u aint tryin to b what ur not, thats a good start, just need to develope ya flow with experience ya kno? ur off to a good start here no doubt tho, just keep doin u n keep grindin... in time every1 developes...no hoook? theres a big gap here... fill that baby in, wait, mayb there is nothing lol, so far a minute of just the beat runnin on, should have cut it out afta ya verse, but good start man, now build off that!

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best Audio Head May- the Omen*

OMEN ON MYSPACE

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Thanks man, I really need the advice...I jus started audio but I feel like im maturing by gettin the recognition and aid in my work...thanks....

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other link

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iight , the beat is kinda repetitive, just put more emotions and its gonna dope, cuz for now u seem like readin off your paper, but yo its my first time hearing you and its pretty dope, keep them coming man

Thanks alot man I really appreciate it

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Iiite man its fixed...can you plz holla

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arright link is working- rtfing....

arright, sounds like your new to it, so everything could use some help, I don't know what kind of equipment you use, but you should check some of the audio tutorials on better quality in the audio assistance forum, and just keep practicing, get more comfortable with the mic, and cool edit, and don't be afraid to let go on when you spit, put your own energy into the song so we know you mean what your saying. keep workin on riding the beat, and stay concious of what you need to make better, and just keep working, good luck, keep droppin.

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Quality is shity, beat isn't yours....it's kinda christian like, I hate U.K accents, it's nothing like Ghetto Quran that's what I'm expecting everytime somebody says lord forgive me lol, but your young so you've got room to elevate.

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Yo thanks 7 3rd...but Morbid...I dontknow what ure sayin...ghetto Qu'ran?

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Oh Now reading back onto it I get you...but Im muslim LOL neways...yo Ill be droppin some more shit

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I'll feed this shit when I wake up tommorow. k lyrics seem pretty good though. From the text you wrote.

this was a good effort but the mic did sound a bit too loud but thats minor to fix

you still gotta work on your flow but you'll get there though...

peace