This is a very nice piece...the emotion is very good and from the text I can see how strongly you feel about the muslims. Though I'm sure the US ain't that bad though, lol. But just like you to know I think the muslims are cool.

I think you can work a it on the flow...because some of those lines are stretched. Maybe up your vocab a bit?

Overall a solid, strong piece, nice work. Keep this up man.

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