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Old 09-23-05, 01:30 PM   #1
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couldn't leave it alone that shit's jus an addiction//
coulda left at 4 that shit's jus my fiction//
devil's game...against my religion//
but its tuggin at my soul, sometimes blurs my vision//
check my precision, i flow like im on a mission//
but yall cant open ur eyes thats jus aforementioned//
but still got money and henchmen, mama good livin//
resume...then i'll get my ribbons//
couple mil then i'll get my siblings//
couple weeks on vaca-, nigga, then im right back in it//
i be right be right back in it, throw tha white up in it//
old Caddy, so i light up in it, goddamn im so so vivid//
u cats so so timid, can i talk 4 a minute//
speak on my vision, me and rap's collision//
so so def like tha label, i be rap's envision//
wat yall niggaz be missin, to heal all of yall i be rap's prescription//
matta fact i be rap's yung gunna//
to come up BIG TYME i be rap's yung STUNNA//
flow religious, so i come as a disciple//
first nigga holdin tha cross, wit tha shotgun rifle//
everybody talk shit like everybody tha illest//
everybody talk gunz like everybody's a killa//
some front, half stunt, and im writin tha pillars//
of wat u are and wat u aren't im considered tha illest//
lets go back 2 tha day muthafucka its Jae//
not that many posts but that nigga on his way//
but still got more 2 prove, couple rhymes 2 groove//
and still got half ounces that move//
check me now on all my moves, can u love me tha same//
first God, and can u bounty tha game//
too broad, criminal, but aint rappin tha same//
subliminal, but aint rappin tha name, i jus happen 2 drain//
all tha blood from these folks, or either their spirit//
either one, i jus happen 2 hear it//
shots fired, niggaz happen 2 fear it//
dead bodies, mama's happen 2 tear it//
but still got spirit, mama life goes on//
u gonna see him when u get there, mama, i like that song//
so dont worry jus keep it in mind//
this rap shit im a keep it in mine, im SICK most of tha time//
so i THROW IT UP 4 all my peers 2 shine//
put it down when im tired plus retired but i keep it in line//
now i pray 2 the above that i make it thru//
till im one wit tha earth, that i make my due//
Suge Knight tha game, and i shud fight u lames//
instead tell u i love u, though u hate me tha same//
i put some dollars up 2 help u thru pain//
u niggaz puppets, i Jeppeto tha names//
please dont catch feelins off tha shit that i say//
i will birth u niggaz, be in labor 4 a day//
i will hurt u niggaz i got more on tha way//
and still work wit figgaz, wat more can i say//

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Old 09-23-05, 03:39 PM   #2
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Old 09-23-05, 03:53 PM   #3
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Old 09-24-05, 11:03 AM   #4
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Old 09-24-05, 12:49 PM   #5
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Ok...first off.Don't put these(//) at the end of your lines.Just makes it look newbish.The concept wuzn't that original..but ok.Your lines were really short....so off cource..it flowed.My advice is too get more complex with your lyrics.You seem too basic.But still a decent peice..good job.

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