Hot beat by Dacypha beats, basically I ask why bout many of the things that troublin me, hope u feelin this song...peep game...

www.soundclick.com/intermental

song is called Findin the answre

will edit in with links

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um.... the quality is ok but... the flow is way off.... u shouldve did this to another beat.... nice try..

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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=209218

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beat is ill an u gta send me dat.... iite you kick in... it sounds like your whispering... lyrics are kool flow drags on a bit some times like.... why is grandad viiiiioooolleeennnt... kinda like dat put more lyrics into ya bars to fill em... not bad thoughy seond verse.... this is better coz this is things i can relate to... dis hook is ll man i deffo want this beat..... iite last verse.. youe emotion is better on this verse it still sounds really quiet don't hold back whern you apit... lyrics arek ool in this verse... quality is iite could be better though,...

lverall decent track.. dope beat ill lyrics just up your flow and youyr emotion and delivery man

Where i hear this beat from... i got something similar if not this beat already.... your flow when you first start off I thought it was a chorus... your emotion is kinda weak. Your presence could use some work as well as the flow.. your lyrics are real simple and the rhyme scheme is really basic. Try memorizing the verses first cuz you'll sound sooo much better. It don't sound like you reading but it sound like you barely got the verse in your head. You prolly shoulda picked a different beat even tho it's dope as hell.

Keep workin at it, Intermental.

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IIte thanks.....i apreciate it

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either memorize the flow like Lady said, of do what I do, and literally flow it 50 or more times before you record so that you basically "know it" even while you read it during the flow session


I don't agree that your "emotion" is weak...I think it's your own delivery style...and I like it...It's your flow that needs to catch up to the delivery...I'm not being arrogant, but listen to Triple N, Me, Tony Self, Doomsday, Enygma, for flow...

listen to how the beat becomes almost back up to our voices...it's almost as if the beat drags you along...OWN THE BEAT NIGGA


I like the lyrics here


and I like ur delivery with the voice and all



and ur ambitious...keep elevating BD



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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=209951

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feeling the beat, homie... i'm digging the idea behind the song but not really feeling ya flow... it's too choppy and sometimes it seems as if you're trying to throw pauses in to stay with the beat or catch up with it at times.... the hook is crazy!!!! you coulda did so much more with this track... emotion was there but it coulda been expanded on a lil more by fixing ya flow... not a bad track... simple lines but i guess it kinda wo rks for this song... keep elevating... and turn ya adlibs down... they overshadowed ya main vocals... not bad... not great... i see the potential... stay up playa

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