When we went our separate ways
I said I would always be there when you needed
but time has passed
our thoughts and words became extinct

I said I would always be there when you needed
but when you came back to me,
I had already moved on
Our love was in the past

But time has passed,
I was promised to someone else
I said we cannot be,
the way it used to be

Our thoughts and words became extinct
the love we shared could not be reignited
only one regret resides in me...
I should have.......
...... never unplugged my microphone

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any feed back please?

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this was good......i loved the unexpected twist at the end.
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lol yea i wasnt expecting that ending at all lol great piece nice twist props

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wow this was pretty basic.....ummm try to use metaphores i guess......it will add diversity to your drop.....oh and nice twist in the end i liked that....

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Originally Posted by Indeph Lyricalsolja you illy on the sickness tip.

uhm damn not even a decent response...lol just messin..........dis was a good poem.....need to work on addin a few more vocab words in there....it was all basic.....structure was tight, rhyme scheme seemed to fit it....n i luved da endin....keep up da good work