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10-17-05, 07:29 PM
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Abyss of Hope
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the swirling radiance, tempting ambition
infinite wisdom, yet theres no on to listen it takes only an instant, to create perpetual motion but it seems like eternity, deciding those discretional notions and with all the conflict, theres little to encourage i loathe growing up when im just eager to flourish its food for thought, yet im not quite nourished and i wont die in peace until i get down and worship? the confusion engulfs you, replacing your concious you'll never get a chance unless your draped with sponsors representing a portion, which only speaks for itself burning through overnight idols, to fuel their hell and all for the well? nah, this pattern is frequent all the garbage out there is derived from the very same sequence you can't tell whats right or wrong, just trust in bliss dreamers never were successful, without that lust to wish but prepare for a spiral: accompanied by storms, clothed in mist its your existence, wheather or not you survive in hope's abyss __________________________________________ yeh, keyed up, no one goes in the other section
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10-17-05, 07:31 PM
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its dope kid. just using to many big words can confuse the reader but it sounds good but what you want the most is people to understand what your saying when you write. I mean its allright to be complex but you know take it down a knotch when dealing with writing emotional pieces or shit like that. smell me?
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10-17-05, 07:39 PM
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IP: AEE8 69E1
uhhm, what did you have trouble with, and why would i kick my intelligence down a notch?
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10-17-05, 07:52 PM
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I just told you man. jeez. its intelligance but people sometimes won't understand. lol
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10-17-05, 08:37 PM
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IP: AEE8 69E1
basically you told me stupid people dont understand words larger than 5 letters, word.
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10-17-05, 09:10 PM
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Drop two link or this will be closed
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10-17-05, 09:52 PM
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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2493481
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2493490 stfu with the links 
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10-18-05, 08:41 AM
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bump...........
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10-27-05, 12:46 PM
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in your system
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bitches.
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10-27-05, 05:05 PM
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meh this was an aight peace...topic was pretty original
what i like about it was the vocab it was quite big....but yet still understandable....there was a few spots where you got kinda tempting with big ass words but it was good....i think you need to work on the flow...it seemed choppy in a few spots....also work on imagry...and emotion...paint a picture for the reader.... not a bad peice stay up
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11-16-05, 06:59 PM
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IP: AEE8 69E1
freestyle muthas
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11-16-05, 07:52 PM
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Cool and shit..
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