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11-13-05, 10:17 PM
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Banned: Biting
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.. Dreadful Situation ..
IP: 4F35 5C4C
*BREAKING.NEWS* Yes Sorry To Inturupt Ur Shows,But We Have Jus Issued A Amber ALert Outta The Small Town of Taylor Michigan Rite Out Side Detroit..*Shows Picture*..Her BackPack Was Found Out Side Redimon Elementry School If u have Any info Please Call...Now Back Tor Ur Program ***..Missing Foot Stepz..*** ..Dawg I Like Difernt Styles,My Flow Change Like Cummin Of Tides.. ..Why Grown Men In American Think Lil Girls Is a Abduction To Try.. ..Lose'n Ur Mind Or Love One Is Sorta Like a Canser Thats Hurt.. ..All Worried,When That Lil Girl missin They Issue A Amber Alert.. ..Pleaing On Tv Bring Her Back! Plz u Couldnt Beleave This Pain.. ..& Saying Love u Hunny,& When Back Ur Room Will Be The Same.. ..Detectives Think She Dead,Mom Crie'n Like She In Heaven Rite.. ..BUT I BELEAVE SHE ALIVE AND IMMA PRAY EACH & EVERY NITE.. ..U In Church After Service Reading The Bible And U Sing Alone.. ..Lead All These Criminal's To justice And Bring My Baby Home.. ..Cop'z Stupid Takin They Time Lookin For Her Wit Dumb Tactics.. ..They Care? Jus Searchin For Drug Addicts,Wit Numb Crack Lipz.. IVE DONE HADDIT! . .v2 . ***..Two Men Walkin The Street Drunk..*** ..Wha Did u Say Jay? We lit Plz Speak Louder Dude Ur Mumblin.. ..Point'd Across!! She in Trouble Kid Im Horney & She Stumblin.. ..He Said Lets Fuck Her Cover Her Eye's So It Will Scar Her Face.. ..Suffocation? Fuck Murder Im Still Gonna Be Charged Wit Rape.. ..I Said Jay We Cant Do This Its Evil & You Gotta Have No Soul.. ..Look & Jay Went To Her And Almost Killed Her in A Choke Hold.. ..Nervious,He Went To The Ally And My Heart Was Steady Racin.. ..I Didnt Wanna Do It,(HAHA)Yea But Fuck It She Already Naked.. ..Look'd Closer At Her Face,Seem'd Young & Hadda Stand Back.. ..& Well She Young Or The 19 Year Old At nite Wit a Back Pack.. ..I Pushed Him Off Her,Like Dude Stop Doing That And No Jerk.. ..& We Fucked Up,He Lookd Inda BackPack To See HomeWork.. . .v3 . ***..Intervention Of Reality..*** ..The Copz Found The Body,It Was The Girl & To Tragic To See.. ..They Told The MOM,She Crying Like No It Didnt Happen To me.. ..u Know a Motive? So We Can Get Suspects & Brace A Reason.. ..She Was Naked But No Good New's & Some Trace Of Semen.. ..Crime Was Commit'd,Found Her Late,Almost Lost The Scene .. ..We Got Good News,Then Points To A Camera Across The Street.. ..We Will See Thier Face ,Pick Em up Then Our Case Be Strong.. ..We Went To The Store,Went To The Vcr And The Tape Is Gone.. ..They Got a Trace Tru Dna,& Semen The Name Was Benji Scott.. ..23 Year Old,& They Went To His Residence It Was a Empty Lot.. ..Figured It Was a Kidnappin & They Wanted To Spend The Money.. ..& Sorry,By The Time We Saw It As Murder They Fled The Country.. |
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11-13-05, 10:31 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 4F35 5C4C
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11-14-05, 12:28 AM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 4F35 5C4C
Frackle.
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11-14-05, 04:38 PM
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IP: D54F CD90
hmm..good stuff right here.
Liked the concept...creative. Kept me interested too.. Also liked some of the multis in ya' shit... My only advice to you is maybe add some internals 'n shit.. Like..instead of just having a multi at the end of the line..try to put some in between or at the start of them as well..to upp the flow a bit..ya' get me? Anways..good shit..keep at it. 1. |
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11-14-05, 04:48 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 152C 42CE
Thanx Mayne.
. . Uppin |
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11-14-05, 07:21 PM
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IP: 31C2 62EB
hmm...Damn homie i was really feeling this you had very good and creative concept...it was very interesting..You had lots of multies , and i was really feeling that..your wordplay and vocab was pretty good aswell but overall it was a very good drop..you could work on your flow abit but overall it was good nice job.
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11-15-05, 09:17 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 4F35 5C4C
Thanx Fam.
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11-15-05, 10:22 PM
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Light Weight
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IP: 2029 97B3
the plot,story n rhyme scheme was hot i liked da whole concept only ridicule i got is dont shortin ya words like da tru 4 through ya know wut i mean if u have it all layed outwit full words or correct shortening wit make it more understandable as far as da words u use n e ways good shit check me out my new shit never die alone posted on om
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11-20-05, 01:05 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: AF0B BD19
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. . . Thanx For The Feed People .. UPPIN |
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