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Old 02-08-06, 04:13 PM   #1
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Exclamation 7 Deadly Sins (MC Collabo/ ft. Key Rogue)

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7 Deadly Sins

{Greed}

Insatiable thirst for power steady risin to new heights
Sensational curse filled wit desire for the high life
So nice, wit everything I want, much more than I need
A whore for the devil wit more than ‘tricks’ up my sleeve
Seducin u wit money an ego of riches drown regret
Twisted so bad u would even fuck for what u get
Place the bet that Im the tongue on ur lap of lavish
Skill above average - the definition in the sin of averice

{Envy}

..They say" U are jealouse" than they call me a hater..
..I bring envy compare to me no other lord is greater..
..I make men jealous of other mens achievements..
..I make women jealous other womens ass and tits..
..My influence on earth cause insecure people to have fits..
..I wonder why I reduce the poor into kibble and bits..
..That material wealth means nothing in the bigger scheme..
..That's why i inject thoughts of jealousy in their dreams..

{Lust}

My ‘Brain On Fire’! Fuck Success My Dreams ‘Aim Higher’! ..
That This Lust Brings Down My Passion To ‘Tame-This-Fire’! ..
‘Pain-My-Desire’! I’m Envious Of Stuff I Don’t ‘Even-Want’! ..
& ‘People-Stunt’! That When I Get It I Don’t ‘Even-Flaunt’! ..
Conceived By Greed I Breathe The Need To ‘Take-Da-Surface’! ..
That Wanting Something So Bad Dont Even ‘Make-Me-Nervous’!..
Either Cash Or Females This Earth Condemns My ‘Cold-Lust’! ..
To Believe In A Society Where I Cant Even Want Or ‘Afford-Trust’! ..

{Wrath}

If I’m pissed, smash windpipes with clentched fists
Rage in a bliss, I blitz in fits ta rip ta bits lil pricks
Top 10 picks, eyewitnesses, break the jaws of dentists
Relentless bitch, my sentences cause blemishes
Contusions, optical illusions, ya losing fa choosin’
To defy, my emotions swirls like chaotic oceans
Disastrous notions grate incensed mates, cremate
Victims at their wakes, fuck the late, feed my hate

{Gluttony}

Stomachs growl-I'm on da prowl-To figure out-exactly how-
i can cram some case loads-crugerans and pesos-
look delicious in my pocket-plus i figure if stop it-
then it's possible i drop dead-Must encourage-and let flourish-
my body's need to be nourished- yet a spurring reoccurence-
of my hunger remains for certain-
is irkin and stressin to where it would lessen my power-
start kirkin out wit da wesson if i don't eat in a hour-
Just a little hunger gets paining rolling out in da floor-
i'll finish dis verse later da pizzas man's at da door.....

{Vanity}

The best there is, was, and ever shall, lions heed my growl
Competitors lay defeated when I scream "how you like me now?"
Lace my palace with mirrors, reflections cast perfection
When I stand still, and greater still when I'm flexin'
Evil aura personified when I'm vexin', I'm still the best in
Dishing blows, call it Vanity I'm God, every entity envies me

{Sloth}

i-- only appear in the nights of dormant times,
i-- cant imagine how tired-some the ppl in this game spit lies/
it like a world of nonsense , brought fourth by guilty concious,
my mind reads nonesense as these so called lazy ass emcee speak often/
not of importance but the utterness of disinclination to action or labor,
why does the illest emcee to spit on the mic who makes his own profit have to be labeled the hater/
Sloth, like rust, consumes faster than labor wears
my lyrics bring hatred and ill novalties to whom trail in tears and those who care/
so my point of distinction is to idolize, not fictionalize the rebirth of stupidity , they've tried to give rid of me /
only lead to more tiredsome idiots who try to get me to morn them in infamamy/

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Greed: BadDest Bitch aka Midnyte
Envy: Key Rogue
Lust: Cornelius aka Blak Siinz
Wrath: Heaven’s Demon
Gluttony: Rob SeVeN
Vanity: Heaven’s Demon
Sloth: Fire Optikz

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Old 02-08-06, 06:13 PM   #2
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Greed: I like your style, basic, had emphasis, came decent.

Evny: Too much of somthin, and not enough of somthin else, figure it out.

Lust: I never related to that type of keystyle...but it was a good read.

Wrath: Sorry, but i didnt feel your part at all.

Gluttony: Yea, good shit...punches had meaning, stay consistent.

Vanity: My favorite part.

Sloth: A tolerance of mind, not bad...if i think deeper i get you.
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Old 02-08-06, 10:26 PM   #3
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Word up this was a really good drop i was really feeling it your structure was good..and both of you had nice emotions and good feeling, Both had some good imagery and i was really feeling the flow of both peices ..Overall this was an exception drop and i was really feeling it ..Keep it up.
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Old 02-08-06, 11:11 PM   #4
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{Greed}

Insatiable thirst for power steady risin to new heights
Sensational curse filled wit desire for the high life
So nice, wit everything I want, much more than I need
A whore for the devil wit more than ‘tricks’ up my sleeve
Seducin u wit money an ego of riches drown regret
Twisted so bad u would even fuck for what u get
Place the bet that Im the tongue on ur lap of lavish
Skill above average - the definition in the sin of averice

not bad, thought you tried to be deep, but came off just normal...uhm, the intro was perfect for the topic, but i think you feel off with wording...not bad though, you have some skill

{Envy}

..They say" U are jealouse" than they call me a hater..
..I bring envy compare to me no other lord is greater..
..I make men jealous of other mens achievements..
..I make women jealous other womens ass and tits..
..My influence on earth cause insecure people to have fits..
..I wonder why I reduce the poor into kibble and bits..
..That material wealth means nothing in the bigger scheme..
..That's why i inject thoughts of jealousy in their dreams..

not feeling this one at all, sorry...just, flow was off, some stuff was corny, like the kibbles and bits....i've seen better key

{Lust}

My ‘Brain On Fire’! Fuck Success My Dreams ‘Aim Higher’! ..
That This Lust Brings Down My Passion To ‘Tame-This-Fire’! ..
‘Pain-My-Desire’! I’m Envious Of Stuff I Don’t ‘Even-Want’! ..
& ‘People-Stunt’! That When I Get It I Don’t ‘Even-Flaunt’! ..
Conceived By Greed I Breathe The Need To ‘Take-Da-Surface’! ..
That Wanting Something So Bad Dont Even ‘Make-Me-Nervous’!..
Either Cash Or Females This Earth Condemns My ‘Cold-Lust’! ..
To Believe In A Society Where I Cant Even Want Or ‘Afford-Trust’! ..

for one thing, you don't need to point out where your inners and rhyming is taking place, thats just distracting and annoying....uhmm, best line was your nervous line, had no flow really, because you were just trying hard for rhymes, so some lines came off as forced...but not bad

{Wrath}

If I’m pissed, smash windpipes with clentched fists
Rage in a bliss, I blitz in fits ta rip ta bits lil pricks
Top 10 picks, eyewitnesses, break the jaws of dentists
Relentless bitch, my sentences cause blemishes
Contusions, optical illusions, ya losing fa choosin’
To defy, my emotions swirls like chaotic oceans
Disastrous notions grate incensed mates, cremate
Victims at their wakes, fuck the late, feed my hate

i dunno, i thought there was TOO much rhyming...i was feeling the style, i like to do that at times, but you don't have to rhyme everything on the line...it kinda got dry to the end because of that....but the first line was pretty cool, good job man

{Gluttony}

Stomachs growl-I'm on da prowl-To figure out-exactly how-
i can cram some case loads-crugerans and pesos-
look delicious in my pocket-plus i figure if stop it-
then it's possible i drop dead-Must encourage-and let flourish-
my body's need to be nourished- yet a spurring reoccurence-
of my hunger remains for certain-
is irkin and stressin to where it would lessen my power-
start kirkin out wit da wesson if i don't eat in a hour-
Just a little hunger gets paining rolling out in da floor-
i'll finish dis verse later da pizzas man's at da door.....

i unno, probly my least favourite, just because i didn't like the topic direction, and your style was kinda all over the place....but it was decent, i guess

{Vanity}

The best there is, was, and ever shall, lions heed my growl
Competitors lay defeated when I scream "how you like me now?"
Lace my palace with mirrors, reflections cast perfection
When I stand still, and greater still when I'm flexin'
Evil aura personified when I'm vexin', I'm still the best in
Dishing blows, call it Vanity I'm God, every entity envies me

Lace my palace with mirrors, reflections cast perfection

best line of this whole thing, basically because its vivid, clear and precise...and its cool...good job, feeling your verse, you're a good writer

{Sloth}

i-- only appear in the nights of dormant times,
i-- cant imagine how tired-some the ppl in this game spit lies/
it like a world of nonsense , brought fourth by guilty concious,
my mind reads nonesense as these so called lazy ass emcee speak often/
not of importance but the utterness of disinclination to action or labor,
why does the illest emcee to spit on the mic who makes his own profit have to be labeled the hater/
Sloth, like rust, consumes faster than labor wears
my lyrics bring hatred and ill novalties to whom trail in tears and those who care/
so my point of distinction is to idolize, not fictionalize the rebirth of stupidity , they've tried to give rid of me /
only lead to more tiredsome idiots who try to get me to morn them in infamamy/

i thought you had a really inconsistent structure, which hurt the whole flow of this...like, you'd have a short line, then a long line...and that doesn't really go well....but i still liked the content you had, it was well thought out...good job

well, overall, alot of different styles, and thats cool....and pretty solid OM, i think the main thing i would recommend is establish a better flow, i unno, i just had a hard time in some flowing well, but word, good job, keep dropping
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Old 02-13-06, 02:31 AM   #5
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thankx for the honest feed... looks like I got the best of both worlds
Worst and best verse,,, lmao that's good shit...
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Old 02-13-06, 07:32 AM   #6
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Sup this was a really good read all the different styles made the whole peice
dope,... I liked this bar,..

then it's possible i drop dead-Must encourage-and let flourish-
my body's need to be nourished- yet a spurring reoccurence-

all together really decent OM stay up all

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Old 03-10-06, 02:24 PM   #7
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I mean the shit was plain hot.. I knew it before it dropped because look at the crew dropping the shit. C'mon now.
Nice shit peeps..
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Old 03-11-06, 04:52 PM   #8
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ay dis was hot....oo.. and key rogue is on it.... a.i stand up..but yea.. dis was real hot like i said b4... im luvin how yall broke it down......yall kept it real.....
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Old 03-16-06, 09:31 PM   #9
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I was feeling this. Is was kinda on the more creative part. But Pretty much in some verses yall tried to sound either too deep or tried to rhyme to much which just pretty much hurt your flow. But this was pretty nice drop right here. Was feeling the concept all the way
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Old 03-24-06, 11:54 PM   #10
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Damn I'm surprised this is still getting feedback... but much luv on the feed... good shit on the props... some honest crit would be great too... and I'mma rtf's tommarrow... don't even worry about it yall... thankx again yall...

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