yo this beat really sounds like some late 80's porno shit..lol

listenin
flow was cool it can use some work that only comes wit practice
lyrics were deep im feelin em i think if you wanna get technical you could use work on metaphors and bar transition but look at alot of peeps who dont have complex lyrics but still are good. i like it like this
presence was there could use some work on emotion this was a really emotional track that should come off in your voice
delivery same as presence i thnk wit some practice you could be really good

love the topic my only advice is to practice and maybe change beat sounds too much like porno music but its all good

keep spittin

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