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04-23-06, 07:49 PM | #1 | ||||||
...Jea...
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dont wanna be alone
IP: 2C6A EE5B
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a love song, slower paced...tell me watchall think hit up either one www.myspace.com/eastcoaststl http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=3835411 feed left on: http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2726801 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2726803 |
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04-23-06, 09:47 PM | #2 | |||
OYD
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IP: 64CA 6C26
yea...heard this beat before
I'm not really a fan of pre-packaged hooks, but sometimes the beat is so good you go with it...I think you could have ad libbed the hook Are the first and second verses rapped by the same person? Flow is decent...nothing outstanding lyrics are decent...nothing outstanding Yea...you def. need to ad lib the hook I like the message of this track...But, your flow is adequate at best, common-place at worst. Decent track 1 |
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04-24-06, 05:26 AM | #3 | |||||||
Nt Your Average
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IP: C435 CFC3
This beats nice,i have it somewhere..........
The flow is koo,falls off al il in some places but you bringi t back koo,deliverys aight needs uppin a lil tho.emotions aight,coulkd be upped.you dont seem that confident though.work on ya presence a lil.i liked the 1st vverse better.did you record em on different days?sounds different. I liked the hook.............. Overall:Koo track,needs a lil work Can you RTF here plz:http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=227049
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04-24-06, 12:17 PM | #4 | ||||
L.E
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IP: EEA9 196F
Listening...
Heard the beat before...almost used it actually. Flow is decent...still need to work on breath control and pacing of it. You'll get it eventually. Lyrics are typical for a love song. Heard the same shit before. Delivery is pretty good. Overall, keep it up. Return the Favor http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=226176 Or did I owe you one..? |
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04-24-06, 03:28 PM | #5 | ||||
New to RV
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IP: 0FCB F08E
i have the beat.. almost used it to... so i feel like more could have been done with it... this wasn't wack ... but it wasn't anything special... the flow on the second verse was shakey .. .. i dont remember the line exactly on the third but i just heard somethin dumb corny....im not sure if im feelin the forceful delievery on the beat since the aaliyah vibe makes the beat laid back thought its semi up tempo...
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04-24-06, 04:54 PM | #6 | ||||||
...Jea...
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IP: 2C6A EE5B
^this was actually a slow song fo rme to me....but yea thanxx yall for the feed ima hit up those links tomrrow....and to tell the truth this is oen of my least favorites
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