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04-23-06, 03:07 AM | #1 | |||||
A Reflection Of The Past
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The Pathway To NoWhere (valor ft. ysdat)
IP: 2029 97B3
Valor = italics
Ysdat = regular The Pathway To NoWhere
an orphan i was, never loved, memories stuck my minds fucked, no one to idolize, never had much shared a room with Twelve others no sisters, brothers or a father and mother i had nothing, ran away when i was fifth teen sold drugs for money, no one ever knew i was missing no files, identification, or social security on record chemical imbalanced mind, no one for emotional support ever became mature as a man, ever since my first step frightened at night, having nightmares while i slept there's no light, all my life iv been living on lies I realize, couldn't remember my family if hypnotized some say keep my head up, but for what reason every day seems like winter, my souls always sleeping crying because i can't remember, shit gets me furious what's on the other side, has me living life curious other sides a dream, gazing through pains mirror reflection dead mother hides my screams, amazing who claims your neglection agonizing thoughts could fill twenty library shelf's blood stained eyes and my pride is thought to kill and hide my health take steps on my own spine, just to carry the pain hate keeps blocking the sunshine, I should just marry the rain witness down pours daily, in this vicious life of lust rapidly slit this frown before they save me, using this knife of trust stay and forever fly alone, like a moth lost at sea who would buy my clone? with all the personified evil tossed at me Place this mirror behind me, to rid of the past agonizingly taste this fear and remind me of my voice heard last sore feet stuck to this path of no return and end I reach out to malachai, but he closes the book named friend soulless empty inside, namless, no were to flee this place time to melt the glass im made of, so you can no longer see your face
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04-23-06, 03:08 AM | #2 | |||||
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IP: 2029 97B3
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=226999
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=226907
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04-23-06, 03:09 AM | #3 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
*holds up CS chain*
If you dont get the ending, read again |
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04-23-06, 03:25 AM | #4 | ||||
-da prophit-
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word up. really good verses. lol i listened to it to the beat of renegade. kinda went with it. pretty good. very good start. the ending in my words was the dude. trying to reach out to ppl but they basicly turned him away. so he was kinda alone and shit with no family and such. tell me if im wrong and word. i liked this piece. rtf on tired of.... its my newpiece.
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04-23-06, 05:35 PM | #5 | ||||
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IP: 5B30 0354
Damn this was really good i was feeling it , you both had very good verses.. both had lovely emotions and very good feeling and imagery , i felt it was just only a little to short i felt it could have been expanded more , but both verses flowed very well together.. overall nice job..keep it up guys
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04-24-06, 10:10 PM | #6 | |||||
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IP: 2029 97B3
thanks upping this
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04-26-06, 02:45 AM | #7 | |||||
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upp upp upp upp
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04-26-06, 11:48 PM | #8 | |||||
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upping this dope ass read.
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04-27-06, 09:31 AM | #9 | |||||||
Oye...Tu Sabes..!!
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IP: 1F89 AAA5
this shit was defniately nice valor. it had the vocab and structure on point. the imagery was there was well. i really like how you made the topic a story. i like this part
shared a room with Twelve others no sisters, brothers or a father and mother i also thought ysdat had a goo verse, his prob stood out more to me.......... sore feet stuck to this path of no return and end I reach out to malachai, but he closes the book named friend soulless empty inside, namless, no were to flee this place time to melt the glass im made of, so you can no longer see your face that shit was def nice as hell, good imagery, good flow and a beautiful description rtf in my diary of a mad man topical |
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04-27-06, 12:39 PM | #10 | |||||||
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IP: A1F4 7B78
this was a hot drop guys...realli nice from both...lacked multies but i guess the peice had more meaning to it....nice job guys
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04-28-06, 02:53 AM | #11 | |||||
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IP: 2029 97B3
word thanks....bumpbump
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