Italicized-Tech Skillz
Normal-H.D.

In A Second The Heart Monitor Stops...
...Grieving Encloses The Room.
Memories Kicked By The Tick Of The Clock...
...And Breathin Echoes Into A Doom.
Doctors And Nurses Seperate Our Hands....
..And The Vibe Concealed Glides In The Air.
Shedding Tears To Guide Gods Plans...
....Into A Single Soul Through Screamin And Cryin.
Withered In Hope To Stretch Her Life Span....
....Gulps That Crack Every Heart Beat To Dying.
A Sudden Last Attemp At Sparking Her Flame....
....Brings A Tear Of Pain To Stream Down My Face.
A Single Kiss, Embracin My Heart With Her Name....
....To Know This Beautiful Rose Is In A Better Place.
Yellin And Comotion Won't Engulge The Feeling...
Of Torture And Memories This Has Left Behind.
So The Fan On The Ceiling Spins The Web Healin....
....Til Death Do Us Apart...Sighs..Your Love Is Mine.


Squeezing our heads together, I've got us handcuffed at the wrist
I know you're under the weather and the situation's got me pissed
The doc says you ain't going ta make it, got a couple more days
My mind is in a maze, yet still I see your eyes is set ablaze
It's to short and that's life, yo fuck that shit you're my wife
You can call me hostile, but you ain't dying in no hospital
You understand me that's why resistance is minimal
You coming with me, you're mine eternally
I'm ya best friend, ya man, and husband, hold my hand
As I place this gun to my temple, envision us in your mental
I've loaded two marked bullets ta send through
My mind ta yours even in death we intertwine
It's love, this is our last sexual act climax and death on impact
Our bodies they'll find lying next to a blood stained letter
Through the good and the bad, the sunny and stormy weather
Fuck till death do us part we just did it together

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This was really nice boo....flow was good....ah...i wish it was longer....like a little more in the middle....but for what it was worth is was nice....stay up ....1

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i liked this piece

there was a decent amount of emotion in this piece...i felt that Tech had a more consistent flow than HD in this one though and i prefered his verse. HD's vocab was better than Tech's in this piece though

overall this was a decent piece, but you should work together to devise an overall flow to this piece, and that would make a difference to the overall piece...

~peace~

thanks for the feedback on that.........

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