ha, that's cool

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=234049
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...086#post3070086
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=234113
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=234111

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check.

match whoever.

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u like tortilla's punches?! i guess u think his voice is tight
cuz it ironic @ it bein the second best u seen.. but ur first choise to bite
jacks gotta be hungry, cuz i can hear his stomach shoutin with in
son, ur supposed to chew chips.. not just bite the FUCK out of them
ya armz are puney, pale as fuck 'n far from groovey
but jack'll be the next great white.. to play as Jawz in the new horror movie
jack's gettin a spankin, but'll bleed from the shankin
cause dawg, straiight up.. is where you'll never be in the rankins
harder than me? nigga please.. i'm surprised u've stayed this long in the league
bitch, you've cum in 'n out so much.. you've prolly even fathered some seeds
i'll give ya a clue, bitch! ya not strong.. so the win, don't u persue it
so kid, ur guaranteed verse of the weak.. cause i'm plowin right through it
'n ya mack battle was wack! thats just somethin u pretend to be
cause jack's got such a problem with losin.. this cat still has his virginity
a scary grin? ha! thats just the start.. i known to get very grim
so jack'll be gainin a lot.. or atleast a spot in one for me to burry him
instead of attack foolz, my crew just veiw past wack dudes
hoe! how are you on the scene??? when no one's even looking at you
u know that i hate jerks! so i put jack in the ground 'n he ate dirt
but if cats land on their feet.. why does this pussy go down face first?
you know i'm a amazing 'n raw, so don't be hatin the gawd
soon jack'll crack a smile for me.. when i'm finished dislocatin his jaw
i'm hittin this fruit, him honest? naw, not him in the booth
cuz if jacks in a white lie.. thats just him sayin hes spittin the truth
i'm a hustla, homie! u a customa cronie! so heres some weed for free
but i'll still profit from ur bitch ass.. cuz ur dealer buys his weed from ME
peeps keep callin! 'n since i got work, i traffick to keep on ballin
but jacks also traffickin.. or at least causes it cuz his car keeps on stallin
seein ya pics, i think of school.. cause beatin this geek really isn't a shocker
'n fuck kickin his ass.. i'm a give jack a wedgy, swirly 'n shove him into a locker

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yo, I might be a bit late, forgot this was due thursday and this girl i'm tryna get at wants me to call her, i'll drop MAX 2:00am

actually forget it I aint gonna call her, lol, i'll start writing now still might be a bit late.

It was 11:57 and I had like 24 lines done... I was keying made fast and getting some illness punches, then I hit a link in the convo, and it took me from this page onto the website from the link and I lost all my writing (I figured it'd open in a new window but my computer is FUCKING WACK)

So ya, I thought i'd let you know that i'm really fucking pissed right now and I feel like stomping on my computer for being a pud. *Takes deep breath* Ok, i'll see if I can remember everything.

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Alright, you dissed on my weedgame, now it's personal, lol.

I'm tellin ya, anything he's sellin aint nice, he aint a fellon with wealth
I saw Untold on the corner with some wack merchandise
he was sellin himself
Get whored, I aint on his dick, but I sling better, honest kid
I could hit up the tittybar and see his girl do better on the strip
Got nothin' on the Rip, cuz i'm dishin out the top grade, I deserve the win
That means if I ever serve some wack herb, it's cuz i'm servin him
Straight servin wimps, I drop to excite the voters, so i'm bestin him
While his verses are such a wild boar I swear I saw Steve Irwin wrestlin 'em
I'm messin up wimps, cuz i'm a bad boy, this guys a geek, so bet I win
And send his bitch ass to the hospital, but we still won't see Met-A sin
Man i'm tearing this bitch, no doubt that my style's scary as shit
But I'm also digging your style... a fucking grave to burry it in
I'm murkin this lame, throwing punches to leave you hurtin in pain
With an uppercut that'll have ya airborn like ya moms gave birth in a plane
I aim & bust, dis lame'll duck when I spray da pump & end dis nameless cunt
Only reason ya verses would be above mine is cuz they plane as fuck
I'm flowing phat, so when i'm blowing cats and hoe'in ya ass
It's No Doubt who wins, even Gwen Stefani knows it's Jack
Son knows I smack foes, exposin me? Nah fuck this dumb hoe's babble
He tried rattin me out but I won't let this pest control the battle
I blow n' rattle, this pud wants to make a stir but he's fake n' wack
So this puddle get stomped on, and he still won't make a splash
The differance between us...
Girls loves me cuz I got fly wheels, while he stays fat sippin his shake
The similairity between us...
I'm swirlin the coolwhip on the road, he's swirlin the coolwhip... on his cake
Honest ya gay, ya girls plays that pushy shit, you play that wussy shit
But he dont need to take orders from his gf for us to see this pussy whipped
You stay on Nick's prick, you whore's blow and when he holds on ya dick
U could turn a kids show into a porno when you drop Nickelodeon on his lips
To end this quick, i'll leave this geek on a crutch
But i'd hate to be brief
cuz I wouldn't wanna be on ya crotch

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Alright, so this prolly has a chance of getting battle of the week I think Nice drop man, lets get the votes coming.

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Untold:

u like tortilla's punches?! i guess u think his voice is tight
cuz it ironic @ it bein the second best u seen.. but ur first choise to bite
lol this made me laugh. good line 8/10
jacks gotta be hungry, cuz i can hear his stomach shoutin with in
son, ur supposed to chew chips.. not just bite the FUCK out of them
lol coo 7/10
ya armz are puney, pale as fuck 'n far from groovey
but jack'll be the next great white.. to play as Jawz in the new horror movie
this was aiight 5/10
jack's gettin a spankin, but'll bleed from the shankin
cause dawg, straiight up.. is where you'll never be in the rankins
coo not bad. 6/10
harder than me? nigga please.. i'm surprised u've stayed this long in the league
bitch, you've cum in 'n out so much.. you've prolly even fathered some seeds
was coo... cum line shit haha... was decent tho 5/10 p
i'll give ya a clue, bitch! ya not strong.. so the win, don't u persue it
so kid, ur guaranteed verse of the weak.. cause i'm plowin right through it
coo.... 5/10
'n ya mack battle was wack! thats just somethin u pretend to be
cause jack's got such a problem with losin.. this cat still has his virginity
lmao dope 8/10
a scary grin? ha! thats just the start.. i known to get very grim
so jack'll be gainin a lot.. or atleast a spot in one for me to burry him
coo good 6/10
instead of attack foolz, my crew just veiw past wack dudes
hoe! how are you on the scene??? when no one's even looking at you
haha coo 6/10
u know that i hate jerks! so i put jack in the ground 'n he ate dirt
but if cats land on their feet.. why does this pussy go down face first?
haha nice 6/10
you know i'm a amazing 'n raw, so don't be hatin the gawd
soon jack'll crack a smile for me.. when i'm finished dislocatin his jaw
this was nice 7/10
i'm hittin this fruit, him honest? naw, not him in the booth
cuz if jacks in a white lie.. thats just him sayin hes spittin the truth
good 6/10
i'm a hustla, homie! u a customa cronie! so heres some weed for free
but i'll still profit from ur bitch ass.. cuz ur dealer buys his weed from ME
lol coo 6/10 /b]
peeps keep callin! 'n since i got work, i traffick to keep on ballin
but jacks also traffickin.. or at least causes it cuz his car keeps on stallin
[b] not bad 5/10
seein ya pics, i think of school.. cause beatin this geek really isn't a shocker
'n fuck kickin his ass.. i'm a give jack a wedgy, swirly 'n shove him into a locker
cool not best line for closer tho. 5/10

overall: 91/150 (61%)
Overall this was a tight ass verse. real nice. real consitent. dope shit. good job son

Jack:
Alright, you dissed on my weedgame, now it's personal, lol.

I'm tellin ya, anything he's sellin aint nice, he aint a fellon with wealth
I saw Untold on the corner with some wack merchandise
he was sellin himself
lol coo 6/10
Get whored, I aint on his dick, but I sling better, honest kid
I could hit up the tittybar and see his girl do better on the strip
coo 5/10
Got nothin' on the Rip, cuz i'm dishin out the top grade, I deserve the win
That means if I ever serve some wack herb, it's cuz i'm servin him
lol this was nice 7/10
Straight servin wimps, I drop to excite the voters, so i'm bestin him
While his verses are such a wild boar I swear I saw Steve Irwin wrestlin 'em
not bad 4/10
I'm messin up wimps, cuz i'm a bad boy, this guys a geek, so bet I win
And send his bitch ass to the hospital, but we still won't see Met-A sin
coo good 6/10
Man i'm tearing this bitch, no doubt that my style's scary as shit
But I'm also digging your style... a fucking grave to burry it in
lmao that was tight 9/10
I'm murkin this lame, throwing punches to leave you hurtin in pain
With an uppercut that'll have ya airborn like ya moms gave birth in a plane
this was nice 7/10
I aim & bust, dis lame'll duck when I spray da pump & end dis nameless cunt
Only reason ya verses would be above mine is cuz they plane as fuck
nice good 6/10
I'm flowing phat, so when i'm blowing cats and hoe'in ya ass
It's No Doubt who wins, even Gwen Stefani knows it's Jack
haha coo 5/10
Son knows I smack foes, exposin me? Nah fuck this dumb hoe's babble
He tried rattin me out but I won't let his pest control the battle
lol this was nice 7/10
I blow n' rattle, this pud wants to make a stir but he's fake n' wack
So this puddle get stomped on, and he still won't make a splash
tight wordplay 7/10
The differance between us...
Girls loves me cuz I got fly wheels, while he stays fat sippin his shake
The similairity between us...
I'm swirlin the coolwhip on the road, he's swirlin the coolwhip... on his cake
ehh didn't really like this 4/10
Honest ya gay, ya girls plays that pushy shit, you play that wussy shit
But he dont need to take orders from his gf for us to see this pussy whipped
not bad 6/10
You stay on Nick's prick, you whore's blow and when he holds on ya dick
U could turn a kids show into a porno when you drop Nickelodeon on his lips
lmao a bit forced but i thought it was ill 7/10
To end this quick, i'll leave this geek on a crutch
But i'd hate to be brief
cuz I wouldn't wanna be on ya crotch
lol nice 6/10

overall:92/150 (61%)
you started out coo, but then middle went off. but killed it in end. Iunno dope ass verse

Quotables:
u like tortilla's punches?! i guess u think his voice is tight
cuz it ironic @ it bein the second best u seen.. but ur first choise to bite
'n ya mack battle was wack! thats just somethin u pretend to be
cause jack's got such a problem with losin.. this cat still has his virginity
v.s
Man i'm tearing this bitch, no doubt that my style's scary as shit
But I'm also digging your style... a fucking grave to burry it in
You stay on Nick's prick, you whore's blow and when he holds on ya dick
U could turn a kids show into a porno when you drop Nickelodeon on his lips

overall, fuckin' ill battle. iunno i got JTR over with ONE point. so I don't know if it'd be fair with one pt. I wanna call this a tie. but iunno. I think y'all should only count this vote if y'all need a tie breaker vote. or iunno it's up to you. But y'all saw my breakdown. this shit close. I'll check this in morning or something. but yea, can't really say more. dope battle. battle of the week def IMO. Up to y'all what you want to count this vote as.

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u like tortilla's punches?! i guess u think his voice is tight
cuz it ironic @ it bein the second best u seen.. but ur first choise to bite
jacks gotta be hungry, cuz i can hear his stomach shoutin with in
son, ur supposed to chew chips.. not just bite the FUCK out of them
jack's gettin a spankin, but'll bleed from the shankin
cause dawg, straiight up.. is where you'll never be in the rankins
'n ya mack battle was wack! thats just somethin u pretend to be
cause jack's got such a problem with losin.. this cat still has his virginity
you know i'm a amazing 'n raw, so don't be hatin the gawd
soon jack'll crack a smile for me.. when i'm finished dislocatin his jaw

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Man i'm tearing this bitch, no doubt that my style's scary as shit
But I'm also digging your style... a fucking grave to burry it in
I'm murkin this lame, throwing punches to leave you hurtin in pain
With an uppercut that'll have ya airborn like ya moms gave birth in a plane
The differance between us...
Girls loves me cuz I got fly wheels, while he stays fat sippin his shake
The similairity between us...
I'm swirlin the coolwhip on the road, he's swirlin the coolwhip... on his cake
^ coolwhip line was creative.


v- untold. this matchup was pretty cool, you guys both brought some hot shit. in the end i felt spul's quotable's more and i felt his misses didnt miss as much as jacks, like for example a couple of jacks worse misses were the plane fuck line < that was played. the gwen steffani line was a miss for me. but overall two dope verses, props guys.

1-1? ..........

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u like tortilla's punches?! i guess u think his voice is tight
cuz it ironic @ it bein the second best u seen.. but ur first choise to bite
meh
jacks gotta be hungry, cuz i can hear his stomach shoutin with in
son, ur supposed to chew chips.. not just bite the FUCK out of them
kool
ya armz are puney, pale as fuck 'n far from groovey
but jack'll be the next great white.. to play as Jawz in the new horror movie
meh
jack's gettin a spankin, but'll bleed from the shankin
cause dawg, straiight up.. is where you'll never be in the rankins
kool
harder than me? nigga please.. i'm surprised u've stayed this long in the league
bitch, you've cum in 'n out so much.. you've prolly even fathered some seeds
o.k
i'll give ya a clue, bitch! ya not strong.. so the win, don't u persue it
so kid, ur guaranteed verse of the weak.. cause i'm plowin right through it
weak wordplay is play'd
'n ya mack battle was wack! thats just somethin u pretend to be
cause jack's got such a problem with losin.. this cat still has his virginity
kool lol
a scary grin? ha! thats just the start.. i known to get very grim
so jack'll be gainin a lot.. or atleast a spot in one for me to burry him
kool
instead of attack foolz, my crew just veiw past wack dudes
hoe! how are you on the scene??? when no one's even looking at you
kool
u know that i hate jerks! so i put jack in the ground 'n he ate dirt
but if cats land on their feet.. why does this pussy go down face first?
ehh
you know i'm a amazing 'n raw, so don't be hatin the gawd
soon jack'll crack a smile for me.. when i'm finished dislocatin his jaw
nice
i'm hittin this fruit, him honest? naw, not him in the booth
cuz if jacks in a white lie.. thats just him sayin hes spittin the truth
dont get it
i'm a hustla, homie! u a customa cronie! so heres some weed for free
but i'll still profit from ur bitch ass.. cuz ur dealer buys his weed from ME
meh
peeps keep callin! 'n since i got work, i traffick to keep on ballin
but jacks also traffickin.. or at least causes it cuz his car keeps on stallin
meh
seein ya pics, i think of school.. cause beatin this geek really isn't a shocker
'n fuck kickin his ass.. i'm a give jack a wedgy, swirly 'n shove him into a locker
o.k


I'm tellin ya, anything he's sellin aint nice, he aint a fellon with wealth
I saw Untold on the corner with some wack merchandise
he was sellin himself
nice
Get whored, I aint on his dick, but I sling better, honest kid
I could hit up the tittybar and see his girl do better on the strip
o.k
Got nothin' on the Rip, cuz i'm dishin out the top grade, I deserve the win
That means if I ever serve some wack herb, it's cuz i'm servin him
kool
Straight servin wimps, I drop to excite the voters, so i'm bestin him
While his verses are such a wild boar I swear I saw Steve Irwin wrestlin 'em
meh
I'm messin up wimps, cuz i'm a bad boy, this guys a geek, so bet I win
And send his bitch ass to the hospital, but we still won't see Met-A sin
ehh
Man i'm tearing this bitch, no doubt that my style's scary as shit
But I'm also digging your style... a fucking grave to burry it in
seen dis a thousand times
I'm murkin this lame, throwing punches to leave you hurtin in pain
With an uppercut that'll have ya airborn like ya moms gave birth in a plane
o.k
I aim & bust, dis lame'll duck when I spray da pump & end dis nameless cunt
Only reason ya verses would be above mine is cuz they plane as fuck
play'd
I'm flowing phat, so when i'm blowing cats and hoe'in ya ass
It's No Doubt who wins, even Gwen Stefani knows it's Jack
meh
Son knows I smack foes, exposin me? Nah fuck this dumb hoe's babble
He tried rattin me out but I won't let his pest control the battle
nice
I blow n' rattle, this pud wants to make a stir but he's fake n' wack
So this puddle get stomped on, and he still won't make a splash
kool
The differance between us...
Girls loves me cuz I got fly wheels, while he stays fat sippin his shake
The similairity between us...
I'm swirlin the coolwhip on the road, he's swirlin the coolwhip... on his cake
meh
Honest ya gay, ya girls plays that pushy shit, you play that wussy shit
But he dont need to take orders from his gf for us to see this pussy whipped
no
You stay on Nick's prick, you whore's blow and when he holds on ya dick
U could turn a kids show into a porno when you drop Nickelodeon on his lips
nice
To end this quick, i'll leave this geek on a crutch
But i'd hate to be brief
cuz I wouldn't wanna be on ya crotch
kool


v/jtr

^wtf.. give explanations son. i mean, i don't mind u voted for JTR, but give reasons why.

nother thing, if u don't get punches, then don't vote. plain and simple man.

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u like tortilla's punches?! i guess u think his voice is tight
cuz it ironic @ it bein the second best u seen.. but ur first choise to bite
.....weak...
jacks gotta be hungry, cuz i can hear his stomach shoutin with in
son, ur supposed to chew chips.. not just bite the FUCK out of them
....LOL Decent and funny...
ya armz are puney, pale as fuck 'n far from groovey
but jack'll be the next great white.. to play as Jawz in the new horror movie
....weak....
jack's gettin a spankin, but'll bleed from the shankin
cause dawg, straiight up.. is where you'll never be in the rankins
....Decent...
harder than me? nigga please.. i'm surprised u've stayed this long in the league
bitch, you've cum in 'n out so much.. you've prolly even fathered some seeds
...Played...
i'll give ya a clue, bitch! ya not strong.. so the win, don't u persue it
so kid, ur guaranteed verse of the weak.. cause i'm plowin right through it
....Good...
'n ya mack battle was wack! thats just somethin u pretend to be
cause jack's got such a problem with losin.. this cat still has his virginity
...LOL Damn Thats Nice lol ....
a scary grin? ha! thats just the start.. i known to get very grim
so jack'll be gainin a lot.. or atleast a spot in one for me to burry him
...Decent...
instead of attack foolz, my crew just veiw past wack dudes
hoe! how are you on the scene??? when no one's even looking at you
.............Played concept......
u know that i hate jerks! so i put jack in the ground 'n he ate dirt
but if cats land on their feet.. why does this pussy go down face first?
....Meh.....
you know i'm a amazing 'n raw, so don't be hatin the gawd
soon jack'll crack a smile for me.. when i'm finished dislocatin his jaw
.....Aii....
i'm hittin this fruit, him honest? naw, not him in the booth
cuz if jacks in a white lie.. thats just him sayin hes spittin the truth
....LOL....Good...
i'm a hustla, homie! u a customa cronie! so heres some weed for free
but i'll still profit from ur bitch ass.. cuz ur dealer buys his weed from ME
.....Damn......
peeps keep callin! 'n since i got work, i traffick to keep on ballin
but jacks also traffickin.. or at least causes it cuz his car keeps on stallin
....Aii....
seein ya pics, i think of school.. cause beatin this geek really isn't a shocker
'n fuck kickin his ass.. i'm a give jack a wedgy, swirly 'n shove him into a locker
....weak...
Overall you had some lines that were ok and some lines that were like damn Then you had some that really shouldnt be in your verse ,....but i guess we all still use fillers ...your personals were on tackt and you came very Nice I give you a 7.5/10

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I'm tellin ya, anything he's sellin aint nice, he aint a fellon with wealth
I saw Untold on the corner with some wack merchandise
he was sellin himself
...Aii...
Get whored, I aint on his dick, but I sling better, honest kid
I could hit up the tittybar and see his girl do better on the strip
...Meh..
Got nothin' on the Rip, cuz i'm dishin out the top grade, I deserve the win
That means if I ever serve some wack herb, it's cuz i'm servin him
.....Good...
Straight servin wimps, I drop to excite the voters, so i'm bestin him
While his verses are such a wild boar I swear I saw Steve Irwin wrestlin 'em
....Weak....
I'm messin up wimps, cuz i'm a bad boy, this guys a geek, so bet I win
And send his bitch ass to the hospital, but we still won't see Met-A sin
...I Like the wordplay but the actual concept was off...
Man i'm tearing this bitch, no doubt that my style's scary as shit
But I'm also digging your style... a fucking grave to burry it in
...Thats somethin like what He said ....
I'm murkin this lame, throwing punches to leave you hurtin in pain
With an uppercut that'll have ya airborn like ya moms gave birth in a plane
...Weak...
I aim & bust, dis lame'll duck when I spray da pump & end dis nameless cunt
Only reason ya verses would be above mine is cuz they plane as fuck
....Decent...
I'm flowing phat, so when i'm blowing cats and hoe'in ya ass
It's No Doubt who wins, even Gwen Stefani knows it's Jack
....Weak...
Son knows I smack foes, exposin me? Nah fuck this dumb hoe's babble
He tried rattin me out but I won't let this pest control the battle
...Weak...
I blow n' rattle, this pud wants to make a stir but he's fake n' wack
So this puddle get stomped on, and he still won't make a splash
.....weak and played...
The differance between us...
Girls loves me cuz I got fly wheels, while he stays fat sippin his shake
The similairity between us...
I'm swirlin the coolwhip on the road, he's swirlin the coolwhip... on his cake
...Strecthed and weak....
Honest ya gay, ya girls plays that pushy shit, you play that wussy shit
But he dont need to take orders from his gf for us to see this pussy whipped
...Decent...
You stay on Nick's prick, you whore's blow and when he holds on ya dick
U could turn a kids show into a porno when you drop Nickelodeon on his lips
...Aii..
To end this quick, i'll leave this geek on a crutch
But i'd hate to be brief
cuz I wouldn't wanna be on ya crotch
.....LOL....I liked that one...

Overall man you had more played concepts in ya verse than Untold did and you didnt deliver as hard as he did and seemd like ya verse was full of fillers instead of actual Punchez and personals but you did have some .,....I liked your wordplay in the middle ....But Overall U get a 5.5/10

My Vote: Untold

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*Bridging The Rap*

Stanza Productions *Dem City Boys*

well it's either we count those 2 votes and it's 2-2, or we don't count them cuz they're gay, and it's 1-1. =/ Lmao, dosn't really make a differance

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