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08-10-06, 03:34 AM | #1 | |||||
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One Way Ticket To Hell
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One Way Ticket To Hell
The wind blows through the demons hair
as it seeks out prey above a rock on the cliff silently groaning was his stomach of terror awaiting a poor youth to stumble and slip taking you to an eternity of torture and pain suffering for nasty harsh sins which were committed do you remember? the depression of blood stains evil laughter's of comedy for the crime you did well lets be reminded with chains in a firing pit hearing you cry, trying to lie screaming ''i aint did shit'' while corpses swim up to your ankles from the lava pulling you in deeper, as the skin melts but not your soul they Fein for new flesh, to play with for ever don't worry Danny you don't grow old, it never gets cold sweating, get used to it while we throw darts at your head tormenting your life like the others, except it's you instead ''he closes his eyes, attempting to wake up from this nightmare .....clutching his fists he slowly opens them, (Lucifer waves -Danny 'were right here')'' this isn't a dream boy, where's your valor it's cowards like you in life i adore what's wrong, your scared aren't you? ..........well your in hell kid sorry to alarm you links http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=233217 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=233227
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08-12-06, 02:48 AM | #2 | |||||
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come on peeps...leave feedback
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08-13-06, 03:21 AM | #3 | |||||
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feedback plz...
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08-20-06, 12:41 AM | #4 | |||||
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upp
upp u guys are wack
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08-21-06, 08:36 AM | #5 | |||||
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Sup Valor
I liked this bar: sweating, get used to it while we throw darts at your head tormenting your life like the others, except it's you instead I thought it was pretty dope, had to read it a few times coz it was like dam !! mainly this bit,... while corpses swim up to your ankles from the lava pulling you in deeper, as the skin melts but not your soul they Fein for new flesh, to play with for ever don't worry Danny you don't grow old, it never gets cold Sick !! And the close well your in hell kid sorry to alarm you !! dope. This was a really good read dope word play, stay up V 1~ |
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08-22-06, 03:33 PM | #6 | ||||||
Whys That?
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ayo this is good bro, felt it. Nice emotion and good concept. Get at me.
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08-23-06, 10:06 PM | #7 | |||||
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word thanks guys.
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09-02-06, 12:39 PM | #8 | |||||
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upping for feed....aint this shizz dope
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09-04-06, 09:48 PM | #9 | ||||||
why so serious!!??
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lol this was defintly original
damn ya'll wassup wit these dark rhymes about devils and shit i think rv is on some kinda evil shit or sumthin nowadays flow was decent...lyrics could be upped but they aint the most basic rhymes i seen the interest level was 50/50 had my attention for some of it and some it didnt but overall not bad u should make sumthin like this on audio id give this a 7/10 keep elevating
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09-06-06, 04:52 AM | #10 | |||||
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word thannnksss
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09-09-06, 02:56 AM | #11 | ||||||
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i think it was ok ,i also think you would have to be in poetry to understand half the things you were saying (or crazy)or into that kind of wierd shit
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09-10-06, 02:26 AM | #12 | |||||
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^^^^^dude its story telling...u dont need to be a poet or anything to understand...its commen since and being able to read
lol be that wasnt feed thanks for wasting my time
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