i aint got time for the emotions and feelings
cause i was dedicated to this relationship like a mothers devotion to children
now my heart is broken and i need healing
im ready to make it work like an employee if your willing
you beating around the bush like beaten dick
theres more fish in the see and ive been start fishing fish
giving me warning signs like a snake giving hiss
going to see you is all work like business trips
i really wasnt ready for a relationship
now hard work with no pay is what your making this
i cant believe you would do this to me again
now all you want to be with me is friends
im supposed to be a g with a g swagger
and youve stabbed me in the back like a dagger
just writing it just makes me madder
and just thinking about it just makes me sadder

i aint got time for theses bitches
got to keep my mutha fuckin mind on my riches
so when we break up dont say sorry nicely
you should feel sorry for yourself cause you'll never find somebody like me

man im getting over you like a denominator in a fraction
like two opposite magnets, there was no attraction
all you was ,was a big distraction
i cant believe we had interaction
you took my heart away like subtraction
now your reaction is leaving me at dissatisfaction
now i got to start asking, did you ever feel passion
cause you saying move on like love is a fashion


i aint got time for theses bitches
got to keep my mutha fuckin mind on my riches
so when we break up dont say sorry nicely
you should feel sorry for yourself cause you'll never find somebody like me


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This was alright nothing to write home about,...

flowed alright but the open was well messy.

aint got time for the emotions and feelings
cause i was dedicated to this relationship like a mothers devotion to children
now my heart is broken and i need healing
*Sends your flow off ^ keep your syllables to around the same length

The rest in regard to flow was nice, vocab pretty basic didn't add anything
that stands out.

Emotions were deep, not much complexity. All in all this was an alright OM

Stay up and keep writing

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good looking on the feedback
and i see what you mean
ill try but my style is my style
and everybody has there own style

but can i get more feedback

i just editted it

can i get some feedback ,i mean damn

Ok when i read the first line and its wayyy stretched and it doesnt even rhyme... Whack.