10-12 lines
u first
g'luck
usual rules

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Breaks This Dudes Windshield With An Adobe Brick

my rhymes are hectic, u dirty fuck dont know who you've messed with/
i'll light your candles out so i can wax this fake poetic/(his title)

Grabs Glass and Sharpens to The Fullest Extent

u see u are wack..im tight with rhymes so ima tell u the truth/(sig)
u dont really rep acro nim...they're just saying they're better than u/
this little bitch claimin he vet battlin new guys, how u gonna elevate?/
so just descend down to the wackest level and except your fate/
Diverse? no, i see no kind of variety applied to any of your skills/
Lawyer is real, kills fake fish w/gills and chills on lakes, hills, and grave pills/

Super Death Bar Taking the Glass and Rotating It In Your AssHole

u serve no hotness, bitch aint shit so u can call me a women beater/
quick ten lines and your status lowers on the Merk - O- meter/(title of poll)

takin long dude.

dmanit foo....hurry up

haha.......my bad...forgot about this shit...blazed right now..keying it up

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blazed??.....sure guy.

ur fucking cool

i see how "vets" get wins...by takin hours on a damn 10 line verse

did you see a time limit fag? i'm posting my verse now, sorry your herb ass is not the most important thing on my list...

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Kids got no bio so i'll have to expose the truth
ashamed of ya wackness..........
..............exposing your guilt and i got proof
Defend yourself carefully, you won't be acquitted
this bitch is a fake, i got tapes...........
...............where his herbishness is admitted
Business suits don't make professionals
your still new despite your disguise..........
...............lawyers=to sharks and your swimming w/lies
Lawyers tryin to sway every single vote
hoping he can fix the polls..................
..............but not if your M.I.A. buried off in Desert Holes
Here's my closing arguement, I'm easily beating you
I'm the 3rd battle you've started..............
.................so mods will most likely have u dq'ed
Next time it's pro bono, i'll help you for free
The best legal advice i can give...................
.................is don't expect to earn a win from me


just for fun...sorry was working on a collab at the same time...here ya go shit-talking little vote swaying fuck

oh yeah, by the way, his alias is Desert Holes

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digging up trash on an herb with a wack ass verse...wow!...

your a fuckin idiot...your not even good and your about to have 5 losses since you can only have 2 open battles at one time fuckin moron...now your gonna get a loss for every battle you have...stupid fuckin herb.....i was busy w/other shit, i don't make excuses...i didn't feed off your verse so why does it matter if it took me 20 minutes to write it...i was working on an OM collab homo...

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first of all..lawyer stop making random lines bold, it makes it hard to read.

opener:diverse you keyed this up real quick huh?, your opener started out pretty good, until the second half where you got real obvious and played..but..but your structure was good, making it easy enough to read...

lawyer tried out using a personal, it was decent, but played at the same time.your line structure was better this time..........::lawyer:

structure: lawyer gets this catagory,even though I fucking hate those bold lines, he did good here...

diverse really pissed me off, by using all those elipses,,,you must have been wasted...... >>>:lawyer::

punches:diverse did well here, I liked how you started with that herbishness line and then proceeded to explain it....you didn't have any played punches..some hit harder than others.......

lawyer had played lines in in his verse, I get it he's wack, can you say it in a more creative way?......................::diverse::

multiples:lawyer didn't have any............

diverse had one or two.....so.....:diverse

wordplay:none

metaphors: none..battle was done too quick I think...

closer:diverse hit mid strength with his closer, the punch was ayite, nothing special,compared to your usual..

lawyer you just rhymed words, you went on a nonsense sort of thing, done right it would've been real effective...but here it wasnt....
::diverse::

vote diverse....


now pay back the respect ya'll and vote on my battles

I dont have enough posts to vote, but here is what I thought......

Diverse clearly merked em....... stronger punches and personals all the way through. Also showed good creativity. Lawyer had some decent personals, but his punches were ineffectual. They didn't hit hard, and lacked the creativity to pack any real punch. Needs to elevate. The bold type in between verses, is annoying....and needs to go..along with the ( ) at the end of the lines....clever poll name...my vote goes to Diverse

Honest Votes> Bruise Banter vs. TJwillingham
Bruise Banter vs. ..Syck..

yea.. heres the breakdown of my point-of-view:

punches - eh.. div: both came good with punches, but diverse's hit harder than lawyer's did, good luck elevatin..

flow - div: <-- easily won, a lot easier to go with, law, yours was good, but div's was a little better..

personals - law: this was real close, but i think he got this cause he had a personal in every line almost, div, your desert hole line was nice..

structure - div: change ur structure law, div, yours was real easy to read, therefore you get this category..

opener / closer - div: really liked your closer div, law, yours were good, but weren't feeling them as much as div's..

nice battle by both cats, liked reading it, just elevate law and you will get better..

vote - diverse

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