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Old 03-16-03, 10:46 PM   #1
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If I shot ya (Exclusive s*it)

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A yo,


If I shot ya, I would'nt hesitate to pull the trigga/

People lookin' at you sayin "that boy's a dead n*gga"/

If I shot ya, I got those sharp bullets that'll drill ya/

Everyone would say "damn, Highklazz killed ya/

If I shot ya, there's no tellin' what kind of gun I would

choose/As long as its' a gun that puts a hole the size of a

tire through you/If I shot ya, who knows where the bullet

would go/hmmm. . . let me decide, either your heart, face, or

throat/If I shot ya, it's because you would'nt give up ya

chain/I asked you nicely the first time, guess I gotta pop

one in ya brain/If I shot ya, It would be for a good reason/

You talk s*it about me, and I'll stop ya a$$ from breathin'/

If I shot ya, you would have to be an enemy of mine/I see

ya a$$ is scared now cause' I went and got my nine/What!

(Tell me what ya think)
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Old 03-17-03, 12:42 AM   #2
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yo,
i like the rhyme skeme you used here, the repetition makes it flow smooth... It's short, but tight. You show promise, keep workin...

Peace.
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Old 03-17-03, 01:14 AM   #3
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Of course it's exclusive shit... where else would we see you?

This piece is okay... it's not WACK, but I can't call it good.
We all see pieces like this daily. It gets tiring to read about how bad-ass and hard someone is on an online forum. And in text, the repetition... the HOOK that this piece is, gets old to me. It has flow, which some people don't have. But nothing here is particularly clever. As if anyone could compose it.
So... keep elevating.

Sorry, you probably want to shoot me now.
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Old 03-18-03, 11:57 AM   #4
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Good Lookin' out

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Thanx for da props. Im'a have more shit for ya'll letter
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