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Read my rap and critisize me.....
IP: 5797 CEB5
i'm on the rhyme 24/7 feeling alive
time to lay down fly shit That might make ya sick lyrics that'll stick to the side of your ribs Give it 100% dawgg, never quit i'd like to ryhme,i'd like to spit but my minds stuck felling fucked musta been That Fuckin bacardi rum Drank too much Time ta blow another spot How bout in the parking lot Mc battlin, procedures for winning Never quit rhyming till you quit breathing Feeling good might as well Take a chance at winning Dj keep that record spinning i don't deal in circumstance Just in battlin rap, is it a fact? Hell yeah,writing rhymes, and wearing backwards caps Keep a mic in my pocket just in case Zero0ne has to come and Tear up the place it's a fucking lyrical race, i gotta keep pace Either that or get left in the dust Time ta bust 2 fully loaded nutz Rap till i'm dead, hell i got the guts Suppose it's the end of my rhyme Post some replies and let me know if i did alright Last edited by Zero0ne : 02-25-03 at 08:31 PM. |
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IP: 5153 3B92
Seems hard to keep up with...try putting it on audio, I need to hear what it sounds like. Hot concept tho, seems inspirational. Nice verse tho, keep writin...
Last edited by Konfusion : 02-25-03 at 08:28 PM. |
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IP: 872B E5DF
you need alot of work this is to simple, try to make the lines longer and maybe some multisyllable rhymes work on your flow
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