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02-26-03, 10:10 PM
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An Army Of One
IP: 5153 3B92
Blast back at me, I’m blocking out all rhapsodies, I’m back at havoc and I plan to rap it on all venoms and trap emcees
In the web of a lyricist, rip spits as clean as ever, I planned torrential downpours during my reign, and I don’t mean the weather Proceed to sever, bust and break cervixes as I’m serving this, purposes made out of evil as I burst lyrics that pierce surfaces Exceed your worthlessness to the maximum of possibilities, I’m the speed of light, you’ll never possess or mock my mach abilities The Watcher invented me, Jay’s rage in a thermal form, ignite and burn your arms, and not the ones that your finger and vermins on Clap like audiences, semi-automatics and army ones, hand pistols and sawed-off barrels to desert eagles and Tommy guns |
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02-27-03, 05:18 AM
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IP: C08C A1FD
This was nice. Ill wordplay and concepts, but after reading it a second time... I wonder if this would make a good song? Hmmm... just a thought... peace...
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02-27-03, 09:16 AM
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IP: D79C 2834
it would be so much better if you structured your bars better...
example: instead of this .............. break it down .......... .... .......... ............... .......... ..... .......... |
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02-27-03, 02:27 PM
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IP: 65D8 B366
Actually, I do usually post my open mics in short bar format, but with this, I just decided not to. Thanks for the tip though. Uppin.
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