what is it that lacks the strength but still can bring any man down.
its profound and responsible for the best of smiles and worst of frowns.
around all towns cities and states a great and beautiful beast.
wears gowns of satin and lace its love makes hate and is a disease.
and its speech is innocent and sweet but its deciet and cheat can kill.
a link causes the without to be desolate and bleak but together is filled.
and still i reach for this poison the assassin of everymans world.
you'd think it was money or power but to man the killer is girls.

*give me my rib back!*

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That ending, the lead in to the ending...god damn, "perfect"...for a short verse, thats what friggin amazing! I mean that! That ender, damn, still,its got me in like a "yoo...wow" kinda feeling.

Fuck, this was great.

Take some lessons Bruk,^^^...Yea, that was supurb, best short verse I've read in awhile... You touched on a wisdom that most people don't understand, but you only touched on it...if you were able to unfold it more for the people, they'd call you king...but I don't think you can have this type of knowledge I speak about unless you were Muslim. Prophet Muhammad taught one million times better than your recent realization...but it's great to see people trying to reach tha bar... but it would take me an hour just to outline it and I would need term paper space...keep it movin, elavatin...

i'm really not trying to compete with the muslim faith.
or reach any bars that the prophet mohammed has set.
thank you for the feedback though. it is appreciated.
upping. come on this isnt that hard to read.

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Yeah dawg... this was short and to the point... i liked it alot... wording was nice.... dope drop kid..... but unlike you, i am too lazy to break it down... lol... i did like it though... Peace

haha lol. thanks man.

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What a fucking idiot.

uppin.

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nice shyt Nyse...i dont have n e thing to say, dat hasnt been said..just wanted to reply to let u kno i seen ya work...good shyt..

thanks man. up.

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dayum homie, too short, but a nice one tho

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D.L.W

short is the point my friend.

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lol nice fuckin drop here son, loved it keep this shit up, amazing read look forward to peepin more of this stuff

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