My lyrics shift the earths core four forties to my niggas down unda
Represent da west, shock niggas, dey call me da boy thunda\
Shape shifta, time twista, nka, nigga known as rhyme blista, my lyricals amplify gravity, Oneman transista\
Quick to shrivel ya nizzle , by stabn dem wit one word sylibles\
My word are criticle, like lesbians wit dildos, wuts da point, its pitiful\
Subliminal thoughts, im so slick, you could record me rhymn, and i wouldn't be caught\
Onemic 12$, OneShirt 17$, gettn hit onetime, couldn't be bought\
Unified, bewtween my paper and pen, the connectin leave me blessn, leave niggas stressn when i frestylewin\
I freestyle in da wind, jus so niggas hear me flow, like cold rivers, i send shivvers, from niggas elbows-to-toes\
My rhymes may be short, but dey still pack a mad heat atttack\
Some qualitys i lack, but fusions between me and rap is intact\

Aw fuck it


One

OneShot, this shit is nice, some good rhymin in there dogg, some nice multis too. You should base your rhymes on a subject though, then yo shit will be better. Dis is a freestyle but uh, anywayz keep it up dawg.

Peace Out!!!!

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Uppin on dis ya'll

like you said, it's short, but it made an impact... this verse was hot man, no doubt, it ain't really topical or nothing like that... but it shows you got skill, nice flow, wordplay, all of that... just straight spittin' and you pull it of pretty well...
Keep it up man... you could try that topical shit an try to spread a messege or idea or something.... but it's up to you... this shit was pretty good non the less...

Peace