This was a penstyle from the middle of class today. Say what you say...


You've listened for awhile and ask: who the fuck is Lyle?/
Am I new school or old? Tell stories or make cats fold?/
Rap poet-cool or drool spit about gats I get and ice I've sold?/
Should I bat some kids or sing love ballads?/
I'm either crack'n upside heads or macking into beds/
Will I cypher for life or get caught up in strife?/
Hmm, should I drop a whole album about killing my wife?/
So raw, I'm red; bite me and wind up dead. Ebola took holda this head!/
Yum, we're cooking beef, and not steak-tomatoes, this is fresh bled meat that burns under gas-fed heat/
I'll blow you away like the last dead wheat whisp—Feel this, bitches! Like a penis, twitchin!/
I'm heavy on the street, but still quick on my feet. I'm hated and bold like sodomy/
You're played and old like Rodney Peete. Will I stay gold or turn Master P?/
Uugghhh! Do you know me? Can you outflow thee? I rap battle while you prattle crap/
You speak standard while my spit splatters like your blood on walls, Red Spackle?? *Get Towels!*/
Anyways, my talk is just play—Verbal food you need to sustain/

So to answer that question now old, before I put you on hold.../
Before you got hit with this bragadocious tangent:/
Who's Lyle?/
Well, my style is variable/
And I'll never rep my area code/
Cuz the fuckah changed when I was like 12 years old!/
And god damn it's cold, despite our lakeside low continentality/
You're faker than me, O(nline) G(angster) dont' battle me.../

i wasnt feeling this one... the end was cool though... some of it didnt seem to flow at all to me... and other times it did but it was sorta weak... could've been your layout that threw me off... but thats the way i read it, and that determines whether i think its good or not... anyways it was 5/10... keep rhymin

ok, not bad dawg... flow was ok, lackin' in wordplay, multies. That's not tha issue, but would have spiced it up more. You fell off at tha end, ya rhyme shceme was odd and not on-point. Ya structure was straight untill tha end. Seems like you wrote it, and then came back later to finish it cause ya left out tha answer to ya question. Keep spittin dawg. All-in-all not a bad verse.

peace..

Thanks guys. I know the flow is odd... I think audio would demonstrate it a bit better than text.
It was actually just the last two bars I keystyled, power of christ compelled me I guess. I had my answer done first, and then tossed it at the end of the rabmling.

Please feel free to criticize, it's all for fun. I don't take myself too seriously.

This one was kind weak...I've seen better from you so I was a little disappointed...Tha power of christ...Huh? Anyways, elevate...

Partially bullshittin'
Sorry, one would have assumed if the prophet's name was used you'd be around.

gotta say i agree wiv everyone else. the way i read it it diddnt flow at all. ya gotta write it more clearly or highlight the shit that rhymes. it sounded like u had alot of good ideas for ya rhymes but u just diddnt fully execute em. 6/10 not that bad tho. anyway check mine shinobi life aight peace

alright man honisty has arrived,
your flow and rhyme scheme was off, the rhymes were made a lil too complex, an god I would love you hear you spit
some of this at work audio, c-mon, Ideas went back an forth, but srt8 mostly on subject, but ya first was a lot better.

So raw, I'm red; bite me and wind up dead. Ebola took holda this head!/
Yum, we're cooking beef, and not steak-tomatoes, this is fresh bled meat that burns under gas-fed heat/
I'll blow you away like the last dead wheat whisp—Feel this, bitches! Like a penis, twitchin!/

The start was coo, the middle was OK, but the third line didnt make a lick of sense, my man you need to
say goodbye say goodbye to CB

not bad.. but not good... vocab was lacking, not really any similes or multies.. try an' improve on these things...

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Major League Management, Inc. material.

That's a compliment right?
lol, just playing.