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|  04-03-03, 04:17 PM |  #1 | ||||||
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				Tears
			 IP: 66BE 210B Watch as this tear falls into empty space See it fall into life's nameless place Can you see the sparkle as it catches the light That sparkle once was happiness that is no longer in sight As it falls watch it, its color has changed From blue to bright red, it has a wide range There it goes all alone, it continues to fall With it, it takes the emotion, the emotion of all Wait, can you hear it? A sob has broke free Has shook the lungs cold, but yet it continues to be Here it comes, a force has been built between the eye A wall of shear water, it's now time to cry A shudder, a scream, darkness envelops your soul The darkness of the night has taken its toll | ||||||
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|  04-04-03, 10:05 PM |  #2 | ||||||
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 | IP: ABE5 5A5C this was good...i could sense a vagueness in your poem...very oblque and nontransparent imagery...fashow good stuff girl | ||||||
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|  04-04-03, 10:27 PM |  #3 | ||||||
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 | IP: 0A08 20B8 im really feelin this, keep on doing ya thing | ||||||
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|  04-04-03, 11:11 PM |  #4 | ||||||
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 | IP: 618E 78B0 nice drop girl.I aint usually in hea and urs wuz tha 1st i peeped.Ill piece right there.Keep postin,Stay ^ -Avi | ||||||
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|  04-06-03, 05:39 PM |  #5 | ||||||
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 | IP: 1466 7895 i was def feelin it...  | ||||||
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|  04-06-03, 06:03 PM |  #6 | ||||||
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 | IP: 6BD9 B531 nice drop..... "A shudder, a scream, darkness envelops your soul The darkness of the night has taken its toll" ^purfect end'n........ keep dropp'n..................... | ||||||
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|  04-06-03, 07:27 PM |  #7 | |||||||
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 | IP: EF0A E7B2 nice piece..i agree...deep poem..keep onit 
				__________________ <br><br><center>- Shiznit - - Tampons are still expensive - - That's a Fact - </center> | |||||||
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|  04-09-03, 10:04 AM |  #8 | ||||||
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 | IP: 3AA1 85DF I'm with errbody else on this...there was certain emptyness in the piece I could feel it just a tad bit ya know....sorta makes you think sometimes....Anyway the piece was very heart felt and emotional nice drop mi'ha Holler | ||||||
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