Yo i dont know what to call this...but peep worked on it for 2 days..lol

The sun gleaming down, there's a light-breeze//
Can it get better? That thought I can't conceive//
The glory, what-a-relief from the constant-stress//
Enjoying the moment, inhaling a monstrus-breath//
No nonsense-left, feeling definite satisfaction//
Happiness isnt always, I'm not forming attachments//
Laughing, smiling, thoughts shining-with-sparks//
Listening to hip hop music, indentifying-the-art//
An angry-remark? That's an inferior-timedate//
Happiness, truly the superior-mindstate//

Lucifa as Understanding...

If you ever been ****ed over or under-handed,
Come to me cause I'm the jewel of understandin/
I've lived a life of many in twenty one years,
So I can understand the complexity of one's fears/
I don't try I just do ... that's who I am,
I'm real and honest never tried to fool man/
Tell me your problems and I'll help to sort em,
I'm not here to take ya shit blur and distort em/
I really do wanna listen to what you need to say,
Just confide in me, no need to get on ya knees and pray/
Just know that when you need that shoudler to cry on,
"I'm always here" like in the words from my mom//

~Switch Style~

I'm an Aspirin-youtH trapped between Lies-and-trutH...
Best Left-alonE when ya dont know, what ya Tryna-dO...
A Message-sprunG, travel thru brains into a Second-homE...
Scouts out MouthS, but masterS is Left-in-domeS...
ExperiencE... is like Four-shotS that Bleed-thru-ya-vesT...
More-shockeD when Doors-lockeD... im the Key-to-succesS...
You Need-accesS... a Info-nymphO being Brewed-constantlY...
If its SecretS.. Leave-iT... this is best Used-properlY...
Knowledge is like Deoderant... they Amount-in-our-liveS...
Only thing is... theres no instructions on How-to-applY...

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your shit is ill son, i like your flow and u have a consistent style i like it. Im still devoloping my vocab and workin on a few styles lke you said in your reply its basic, and i agree. I can devolop my own style but the vocab is somthin im tryin ta get help wid, I think u have a set style and very good vocab as shown in this piece, juss my opinion- if u used more multis ur shit would damn near flawless kid.
keep droppin and hit my pieces up wid advice and suggestions
peace

i was feelin all the verses on that
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Grand Thef & 12cent thnx for the feedback and critiques na'mean and Grand yea i mean everyone has problems on Words area na'mean but u just have too keep on comming wit more open mics or Battles or anythang that shows.....na'mean....Thnx i apreciate comments any other critiques Holla how can improve this??

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I remember when I used to do peices like that. It brings out a story and thoughts. I believe this one was a little different than what I've seen before so good work. Keep telling stories