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Old 03-24-03, 03:42 AM   #1
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Demented Lyrics

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Time for me to make my debut.....
12cent....you know who I am


My words have been put through the fires in hell/
and came back more alive/
but more demented then cells/
infested with satan embryos and some herpes as well/
might as well tell you the entire truth/
my lyrics are might as hell/
Shit! they're still in the booth/
I had them caged and in a straight jacket for two/
but they probably chewed/
and rapped their way out of that too/
The sky is no limit for these diseased pumped word demons/
They pry even from three ringed ink pads in the form of exorcisms/
only one way to defeat these elitle freaks/
is to create a way to trap them into a beat/
nahh...thats to hard/
I let out a relinquished squeak/
then i begin to think/
that humans are just too weak/
lyrics send out a message that process before we blink/
words contain a breach/
which lyrics link in between/
Its own brand of DNA, flipped backwards A-N-D/
which signals lyrics to continue forever dementedly/


peace....
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Old 03-24-03, 03:43 AM   #2
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Im new guys...

critique the hell out of me..
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Old 03-24-03, 09:31 AM   #3
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cmon people talk to me
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Old 03-24-03, 09:35 AM   #4
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I liked it.. the flow was pretty tight, vocab wasn't amature, bar length could be a bit longer, but I'm not sure if it would flow as good if it was...
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Old 03-24-03, 05:10 PM   #5
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"Its own brand of DNA, flipped backwards A-N-D/
which signals lyrics to continue forever dementedly/"

my favorite line deezy
nice debut, nice flow, nice vocab
mad uppins
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