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Old 03-22-03, 01:35 AM   #1
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Angry my freaky lover

IP: 5153 3B92

fell off in da club looking so damn clean/
eyes low and I'm smelling like a pound of green/
scope tha area just to see what I could see/
and find out which one of these hoe's comming wit me/
so I proceed to make my way over to tha bar/
but something caught my eye best looking gurl by far/
she had caramel skin wit some round shaped tities/
and a ass that made a nigga want to dance like diddy/
but naw really did'nt even know what's in store/
how wuz i gonna know that I wuz fuckin wit a hor/
later on tha next day I decide to give her a call/
asked her out to a movie but I just wanted them draws/
and now I'm done that's all I wanted that's that's/
but tha pussy wuz so good it keep a nigga comming back/she was feeding a nigga and doing me right/
luv is blind you cant turn a hoe into a housewife/
I felt that was my pussy, that was my head/
I'm feeling like dru hill somebody sleeping in my bed/
never knew cuz I aint tha one to catch feelings/
no idea that tha pussy would have me illing/
I come over for a suprise visit/
but somthing is foul this situation smells shitty/
she said she would'nt cheat on me.... what am i thinkin/
I guess my babby in here sleeping I'll just creep in/
aint this a bitch I cant belive what a nigga seeing/
I'm in a rage like I been took over by a demon/
sit down bitch this aint no time to push and shove/
but when I cam 2 I'm standing in a pool of blood/
all I remember is me puting a choke on him/
I cant belive this shit just happen I killed both off them/
broke down on my knees cuz i knew that shit was'nt right /
but I'm paying for it now looking at 25 to life/
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Old 03-22-03, 01:37 AM   #2
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this was all of tha dome tell me if you feel it or not
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Old 03-22-03, 10:25 AM   #3
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u started it off hot
the middle was aight but u couldve done a lil mo work on ikt but its coo
this reminds me of a song by Nas
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Old 03-22-03, 11:50 PM   #4
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i wasnt really feeling this topic... i've seen it done more than a few times... it was alright but you lost points in the creativity section... i give it a 6/10... keep rhymin
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