you better fasten ya seatbelts cause i'm bout to wreck this shit
VIP sucks so much its past deepthroat, he's bout to neck this dick
try to step to this? the outcome will be like christopher reeves after horse back ridin
i don't get it, usually nerds are good with words but it seems this dork lacks rhymin
but fuck it, i'll detach his head from his body like a lid from a can
the only way he's comin close to touchin my rhyme is when i spit in is hand
treatin VIP like a toilet cause i'm bout to shit on this man
cause he's a kirsten dunst type bitch but he still can't Bring It On
i'll admit, he raps about the same as me but thats cause all he does is just sing along
now i'll pull his arms back and make his shoulder blades touch
man all of ya rhymes are unwanted like some older age sluts
i mean ya shit wouldn't be phat even if it came from an over weight butt
so fuck spittin rhymes i'm bout to spit my nut all over this odor stained cunt
this stinky pussy, i don't know why he's thinkin that hes somethin
cause he's actually like brite eyez' crotch area, he really aint nothin
oh you think i'm bluffin? well lets check this shit out
i'm bout to hip yall to somethin ya probably didn't know about
see VIP beat me here but i killed him on Platinum
we were equal there but he had his Dickriders here, hmm....what do you think happened?
now i'll metaphorically cap this cat with his own Lyrical Gun Play
him beatin me? ha, that'll be a miracle some day
now i could be the nice guy and just say you wack but instead
i'ma shove my fist through ya mouth til you spit out the back of ya head
throwin open handed punchlines cause all it takes is one slap and you dead
now i'm causin a disaster like there was a presence of a Cyclone
and VIP aint gettin no love like a guy watchin an orgy at a dike's home
cause i'll do anythin for a win, i'll even trade a member for it,hows that sound?
not quite sure? i'll let another one just ask to be in, how bout now?
or i'll just squash ya brain to help get rid of your Verbal Intelligence Problem
tryin my hardest to do anythin that's irrelavent to solve em
man if you were around since the beginnin eve must've been yellin out "your wack adam!"
the only time VIP is ahead of me is when i'm behind gettin ready to back stab em
and after i back stab you, i'll force bullets ya way til i'm out then throw the gat at you
like tupac i aint mad at cha,i just wanna put ya to rest
i don't care if it takes two to ya chest i'll be doin my best
man i need to make a doctors appointment cause i'm bout to get sick wid it
the only way i'm losin is if i jacked VIP for his style and spit wid it...

damn dog id repost the shit i ilkie but itd be a full copy lol good shit man

sorry i didn't get a word you said^^^^^

it was nice..

thanks so far but if i could get a lil more details on the feedback that would be great...

"VIP sucks so much its past deepthroat", hahaha... my favorite punchline there... shit had me laughing kid.. then you had some other punches, some strong, some weak, kinda 50/50 ya know... this was pretty decent, had a good amount of energy, holding nothing back, should work on that flow though... your bars and shit, seemed distorted, and a bit too long sometimes, if you had more rhythm, shit would have sounded nicer...

Peace