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04-08-03, 12:21 PM | #1 | ||||||
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gushing like oil or hot steam from fissure
i am the well she, the wisher, coins leap from her fingers, spindles of lust long digits full of feeling and i have none... this composition my confession my omission and obsession, nightly purging session corruption in corpusles break bones tear muscles burn stem cells with devotion synapses set into new motion illiterate alliateration, emotion constipation petrarchian compensation not a new sensation salvation just assupmtion, ascention not withholding feet constricted on the ground stuck to ambulitory motion lumber through composure, explosion just a smolder shoulder to the boulder feels a whole lot older lungs filled to capacity god i wish it wasn't me but god hasn't listened since i fell into captivity nativity a memory this girl has got the best of me million fishes in the sea no help cause i'm an oddity, a mammal not aquadic, episodic she's erotic, expell what i extract replica exact, in fact sinew will contract and cause this heart to crack, broken heart smashed back original shape and left intact blue eyes left black holes inside my heart's walls new guys she takes home my romance my downfall corrupted heart strings feelings bring the strong sting so i sigh and go on that's what we are built for |
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04-09-03, 02:18 PM | #2 | ||||||
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uppin. feedback. no real romantics left i guess.
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04-10-03, 11:38 PM | #3 | ||||||
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this piece is gettin slept on like sealy posturepedic.
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04-17-03, 11:26 AM | #4 | ||||
Straight Savage.
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Aiyo roux, you wuz madd at me over some of my rhymes, but i gotta give this up to you right here. This shit was hott, keep on wit tha good shit.
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04-17-03, 01:45 PM | #5 | ||||||
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I liked this one alot.. at first it started out and you didn't yet know your topic.. then... it progressed to it. It was nice. OoNnEe
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04-17-03, 10:49 PM | #6 | ||||||
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^^ for more feed back, thanks angelic.
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04-20-03, 05:50 PM | #7 | ||||||
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...powerful..
...a piece containing a strong use of vocab, complemented by a fair amount of vivid imagery.... ...at times seemed to go up and down levels in an unusual and disrupting manner...but that was rare anyway... ...very good piece in my opinion....and hit kind of hard too... ....resp.... |
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04-20-03, 11:20 PM | #8 | ||||||
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t/y!
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04-26-03, 11:27 PM | #9 | ||||||
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^^
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