Daybreak, I'm laying on my bed in silence unable to move/
Passers-by giving a passing glance I have nothing to prove/
A powerhouse on the inside yet dormant in my actions/
Tattooed up with labels and numbers in orderly fashion/
Darkness creeps upon my lonely slumber in my isolated chamber/
Silence is broken the instance I'm rushed by a couple of stangers/
No resistance dwells within me as I am rolled onto baron flats/
Strategically placed beneath a metal device which I am soon attached/
Destination unknown but knowing that there is no coming back/
No family or friends to bid farewell I'm a lone soldier releasing my wrath/
The thumbs up is given, my moment of truth approaches me relentless/
Trigger guards lifted, time to release my detained internal convictions/
Passing through a stage of haziness my destruction is imminent/
Light becomes visible through the haze approaching the end of it/
Taking up the sights from above yet only one place has a meaning/
My comrades watch from the heavens the distance between us increasing/
Point of impact is met, smashing through layers into the Earth violently/
My sacrifice was a victory for my army as my country celebrates triumphantly/

ThIs WaS OfF ThE HoOk MaNg NiCe JoB DuKe 1..

hmmm...so...your good.

I wasn't to sure on what you were hitting at, then that ending line...and damn D, you got that mad skill to rip that one last line and make the whole song frigging amazing.

Hey D lol

i was feelin that...a lot of emotion in that rhyme, wished it ws longer but you did finish it amzingly...nice wordplay and all that good shit....one

dat wuz hot..I'd luv to hear dis in audio ova Mobb Deep's "Eye for an Eye."U had sum heart 2 makin it sound amazin as f*ck.Im uppin dis 4 ya^^^^.Stay ^
-Avi

return tha favor and peep my joint 'Holocaust Poem'

datz sum hot shyt right there homie.....mad propz.....keep postin shyt like dat

What's hot? Domain 9 hitting the earth in tha nick of time...
Before he's able to spit tha rhyme, tha earth shook six times...
But this test of mine'll leave all tha rest behind...
pressed to my chest, I'm placin' this vest of mine...
to blow tha earth's curves flat...men lyin' on backs...
Explosive packed raps...to circumvent tha cracks...
to leave your humvee fire black...drenched in an acid vat...
split tha path...with my spine that split in half...

Yeah it was tight...just thought you'd enjoy to see tha other side for a second...return tha favor, peep my joint(monkee veiws)

Thanks for all the positive feedback. This was probably so short b/c I haven't wrote anything in a while and I got that idea from all the war news coverage... so, I wrote... This is what came of it..

uppin

I had to read this twice cos it just diddnt hit me wat u were saying till the very end. it was very nice. tight flow, nice vocab (suited to the topic- a hard thing to do) yea it was short but you diddnt need anymore bars to express wat u wanted to say. it was nice.

ANYWAY RETURN THE FAVOUR AND CHECK MINE BANGKOK BUISNESS aight peace bro

This was dope D...I agree wit Bruk on this...I was tryna grasp on to wat U were gettin at but that didn't happen really till tha end...This was nice...Keep writin' man...Peace

shit was mad tight domain...last line finished it up blazin...was a ill verse,hope ot see an expansion on the shit some time...real nice...
bismillah

What kmfrob said is what I was going to say now... to really understand this you'd have to read it twice... it clears everything up at the end and then if you go back and read it again you'll understand everything all the hidden meanings of the words I used such as what the "bed" is and why I'm falling away from heaven and such... I really thought this was dope so I figured ya would enjoy it too... thanks for the replies

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yeah, I read it a few times, I liked it. The first time I didn't get it until the very end...then I had to read it again. Can't wait until you post some more verse and rhymes...peaz.