There is an idea of a Patrick Bateman; some kind of abstraction. But there is no real me: only an entity, something illusory. And though I can hide my cold gaze, and you can shake my hand and feel flesh gripping yours and maybe you can even sense our lifestyles are probably comparable... I simply am not there... Patrick Bateman


the sneak preview, hallucegenics that free evil/
make the feeble do obsessive vibrations from turntable needles/
stay on point without religion like burning churches and keeping steeples/
blaze mcs like forest fires, and my life's speaking of a sequel/
you thought you were walking in an airport cuz you tripped down so many flights of steps/
take the shape of any plane, many lays to your right or left/
i flock chronically smoke to provoke to spit the shoe shit out/
my lines are Fire when i'm Stoned like tires that burn like Houstons house/
these clouds of blunt smoke make my lungs hold to my chest/
take it in and get dumb red like retards holding their breath/
fuck over random people like serial rapists its a manogomy/
i'm the artist thats hard to see like the face of your partner during sodomy/
i've been on punch lines caught in lunch time snorting kool-aid powder/
tracks are matching, circle the highway at two miles an hour/
still tag a block, take a risk, no wonder they clock/
(who?) them cops, feel like a wrist cuz i'm constantly under they watch/
for better words, scroll back to the top and start re-reading this verse/
comprehending this is harder than reading license plates on cars darting off in reverse/
constantly bombing buildings/
autohrities want me killed or rotting in prison/
thats why i display sickness like lauching viruses in to the solar system/
put you money where your mouth is, i make you cough your cash/
then rip your face off like it was an Alphahydroxy mask....
TEST...the Patrick Bateman in this industry/
making you keep your head down like an erectile deficiency/
at tremendous speed, to hit you outta range, wha tthe main target is/
twisting trees like hurricanes, Patrick Bateman better known as the Narcicyst....

some shit i wrote in like 5 minutes....feedback please

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this was a nice drop. i felt the topic and u also had some nice wordplay in there. just work on ya multis and rhymescheme and ya ish'll be better. Keep spittin and elevatin. 1

thanks...i wasnt workin for a multies verse though for your information...and as far as rhyme schemes go i think it was pretty good...but i appreciate the feedback...good looking out...one

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I liked dis man it wuz hot.Ya had sum good vocab in there and it flowed pretty consistent.Ill drop,Stay ^
-Avi

thank you...you know i gotta be versatile with my shit cant be only flowin one way namsayin...its a new style i'm workin on for a new alias of mine...good looking out....one

uppin...

yo dog dat shit was tight, keep flowin man

thanks dunny

uppin

As always it's a keeper Narc...them, theys tha sleepers...sleep on me too, if you wanna...Vote on my battle with Shadow: Linez Vs. shdow dog...you'll see what I mean...peace...good drop...

no doubt dunny...imma peep that shit and thanks for the reply...one

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still uppin this and it was from 3 days ago