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caustic saliva
IP: 22BA 15F6
heads been poundin for days, tryin to avoid sun's rays/
grey waves of depression stays a haze plays on my vision explain// why i feel so insane i won't stray the mission destruction of confusion corupption rhtym, you have it or you don't, that's a phallicy// i'm in em, every sprouting tree, every cloud i see, every child agrees i'm up on the rise, ya'l can see me now cause you don't see wit ya eyes you percive wit ya mind, corrupted enterprise, compromise the skies i can see between the lies this text is the weapon i'm weildin an steppin// rippin and stretchin minds eye of perfection raise the alarm, i'm out to do harm// like napoleaon the pig from "animal farm" political vendetta, vandal fire spreadda// robbin you all but i aint takin chedda i think that you know betta, a "ruger" not "baretta" my mind is like the nine the bullets kill ya deada words like hurricanes and typhoons do damage// verbal pilgrimage to my roots i pay them homage caught up in this conflict, use instinct an run quik// lick lips and spit shit volcanic and so sick a blank slate from the acetate// top rate prstitute my prostate, probate, private alliterate illiterate |
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IP: 9B91 D0C6
The Flow Was Bit Choppy But Was Still An Aiight Piece... Keep ya Head Up
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IP: E2EE 59B6
I agree on the bit choppy. I think it just need a better flow to it... it was still an alright peice. OoNnEe
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IP: B14D FC00
one word: flow
like everyone else fix that, up your vocab you'll be straight for a minute or two and if someone has "Don't Bull Shit, It's the internet .. no need to take this shit serious." and has over 300+ posts.. bitches who contradict themselves can't give advice to others.. what's this kid thinking.. because in order to have that many replies/post you have to be taking this a little to serious, serious being the keyword. advice from above |
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