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Old 04-16-03, 08:33 PM   #1
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Supressed, It Rests Within....

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Kind of quick, just getting some stuff out.....

The heat is coming down upon my heart
Oh clogging up my veins with fatty foods
Some call my pain a dark twisted form of ART
But it's just to ride through the coloured moods

I see red when in the catacombs of my soul
But the blue so deep sinks me into a trance
Green so epic with mother nature holding true
Black the ashes that come from my burnt insides

Slowly getting up i move into concrete woods
Artificial lights mirroring the games i PLAY
Oh how i hurt those many now laying in my wake
Yet so many oblivious to the hoors they once were

I'm a pimp of life generating darkness in sight
As i walk towards a car trashed in temporal hate
Falling to my knees i grab it's flailing front
To shed it's tears of fleeting extremes in silent bait...

Do not evoke the fury of my PLAY
For anarchy shall fall in many forms
Note by note it shall be composed
To devour all by way of chameleon ART...



*i'll change it later!

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Old 04-17-03, 11:33 PM   #2
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Alright i read this and liked the descriptive passage on the four colors it gave lots of imagery--pretty nice piece though--catacombs sounds familiar lol

like always keep it up man nice words nice

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Old 04-18-03, 07:47 AM   #3
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och! Guessing you used it in one of your pieces?! Used it many a time before...so don't worry, aint no shananigans of those sorts going on here...(!)...

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Old 04-18-03, 10:01 AM   #4
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nice piece...most of your verbals is....i enjoyed readin it...please read some of the poems i have written in here ....wahid
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Old 04-19-03, 08:23 PM   #5
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^^^^erm, what do you mean by verbals?!...

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Old 04-20-03, 05:28 PM   #6
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this was freekin beautiful. so many aspects in every verse i could give props for. creativity with flush vocabulary. biGG uPPS on the color verse using simple imagery just painted the peice into a picture. even though ya have sum infatuation with fire threw out the peice. the last verse had a intense moral message, that was clevorily writ. like i said before this as freekin beautiful.

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Old 04-20-03, 06:03 PM   #7
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^^^once again, you're right Joey...i used the word 'burnt' twice, i didn't realise till you pointed it out...i'll change it later...as i said, i did it kind of quite, just getting some things out...

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