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Supressed, It Rests Within....
IP: BFE5 28C7
Kind of quick, just getting some stuff out.....
The heat is coming down upon my heart Oh clogging up my veins with fatty foods Some call my pain a dark twisted form of ART But it's just to ride through the coloured moods I see red when in the catacombs of my soul But the blue so deep sinks me into a trance Green so epic with mother nature holding true Black the ashes that come from my burnt insides Slowly getting up i move into concrete woods Artificial lights mirroring the games i PLAY Oh how i hurt those many now laying in my wake Yet so many oblivious to the hoors they once were I'm a pimp of life generating darkness in sight As i walk towards a car trashed in temporal hate Falling to my knees i grab it's flailing front To shed it's tears of fleeting extremes in silent bait... Do not evoke the fury of my PLAY For anarchy shall fall in many forms Note by note it shall be composed To devour all by way of chameleon ART... *i'll change it later! Last edited by varentao : 06-22-03 at 04:39 PM. |
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IP: 6270 F982
Alright i read this and liked the descriptive passage on the four colors it gave lots of imagery--pretty nice piece though--catacombs sounds familiar lol
like always keep it up man nice words nice -1-
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IP: BFE5 28C7
och! Guessing you used it in one of your pieces?! Used it many a time before...so don't worry, aint no shananigans of those sorts going on here...(!)...
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IP: 27EA 5505
nice piece...most of your verbals is....i enjoyed readin it...please read some of the poems i have written in here ....wahid
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IP: BFE5 28C7
^^^^erm, what do you mean by verbals?!...
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..terror walks again..
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IP: 5153 3B92
this was freekin beautiful. so many aspects in every verse i could give props for. creativity with flush vocabulary. biGG uPPS on the color verse using simple imagery just painted the peice into a picture. even though ya have sum infatuation with fire threw out the peice. the last verse had a intense moral message, that was clevorily writ. like i said before this as freekin beautiful.
stAy up
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IP: BFE5 28C7
^^^once again, you're right Joey...i used the word 'burnt' twice, i didn't realise till you pointed it out...i'll change it later...as i said, i did it kind of quite, just getting some things out...
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