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"My truth (vol. one)"
IP: ABA5 8558
aight im just gonna start writin and see where it takes me
not happy, not sad, just depressed and numb/ rotten mad manifested in this run/ becoming angry with no feeling, robbing a bum/ and i'll bum around 'til my album comes around/ but i aint holdin' my fuckin' breath/ i can rap and i can rip it to ribbons 'til there's not a drop of ink left from my pen's confession/ when it's lyin dead on it's death bed, i had a premonition/ of no fame, cuz i cant be what the world wants/ refuse to sing bout bling bling, dubs and guns/ fake gangstas rep mac-10's, AK's for fun/ shit i should get more street cred from squirting a water gun/ fuck fake bling, fuckin' cubic zarconium/ gets me pissed til im convinced that life's a fluke/ makes me sick til i sit and i PUKE!.../ the one girl that i ever truly ever wanted/ is the one girl whos future daughter i could never truly ever father/ i cant get weak in the knees when i speak to her.../ cuz my knees are broken 'fore i even look at her.../ i live my life minute-to-minute constantly waiting for 8:11am.../ see the devils grin cuz im sinning-to-sin, with a knife to feel again/ can this blade end the Hooligan?/ dont know but willin' to try again & again & again/ 'til my hands come the fuck off.../ cant get a girl to break my heart/ so i pull it out myself and rip it apart/ burn it til the ashes are permanently dissolved in the ground forever/ that way the earth will forever feel my agony/ this cant be happening to me/ wheres the congregation of my Hooliganation/ to come & praise me and lift my self esteem, luv my homies/ in rehab cuz im a dic ryder fiend/ hows this bitch threaten castration/ when my nuts already disapeared from my constant masterbation/ im just nuttin puffs of dust, too much lust/ no longer beatin off get off but beatin my dick off to put it in the ground/ but my hearts already there/ so instead i shake my cock in the air/ screaming out loud "GOD I NO LONGER FUCKING CARE!!"/ would be poppin Prozac by the bottle/ but pain's my only fodder to father hotter/ drops that are more repetitive then g's that roc proda/ so this is my truth volume one/ my hand is infected with carpal tunnel syndrome so i guess im done/ and im done folks/ and im done. sorry it ended up bein so long but u know how it goes please if u went to the trouble of reading this go to the trouble of responding i will return the favor thx |
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IP: 1501 77A0
i read the first bit and it was wack, i couldnt be fucked readin more tehn 5 lines cuse it was shit
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IP: 36E2 1765
tht shit was sick br0
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IP: 2D3B 131F
blah this was average....
the biggest flaw in this piece was you lacked cohesion, your subject matter swapped and changed and it made you verse seem like un attached sperate verses.... other than that, it was a bit too simple, simple vocab and simple structure, you did have some nice lines in there and some nice mets too, but overall this piece was just average |
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