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my writers block is gone
IP: 1769 3B0F
IM THE GHOST WRITTER THAT POLISHED YOUR STYLE AND HELPED YOU SHINE-LIKE COMPOSING ON LOOSE LEAF YOU CATS STAY WRITTING OF MY LINES-
my first draft-hit's like a car crash-with no seat belt. backlash- of whiplash-when im done i ll still be felt- pain still being delt-and you got the bad card-the joker cause i laugh is you think you ill with bars-remakes trying to be hard- remix puff daddy raping like jermaine dupri on a track for el debarge- i spit from the heart-you fake waite till your prostetic parts- fall apart-writen is like painting murder on canvas i master the art- a warrior like NOPEON BONAPAURT-these kid is ghetto like k_mart- no body uses my ibonical dialect-on open text- so when i battle i am the ghetto waging war on you redknecks-so how can i be a loser when the cat who gave me a loss hasnt been met- i'll battle anybody regardless of rep-especially you concided bastards ...make em swallow they pride kill them with context- and meanimate them to live with regret- use-redicaule-to make you meniscule-you can only flow to bitches and stay comin short like JA~RULE- your style been broke-this kid been freestyled a choked-got yoked- bathed in my flow after i left him soaked-battle me that would be dope- but battle me and win try fighting full blown aids you'd have more hope- NONCENTZ has spoke- and left you feeling like a slave cause your careers at the end of a rope- better than me......? nope! a true m.c......?joke stick a condomn on your dick cause you staying fucken up your flow- wont say fuck but buck you fags....when my punchlines alone are iller than any disease magic johnson had-CENTZ has gone mad-and wont stop even if you paid me- like mariah carey in conflict with sony- hate record labels SO FUCK TOMMY- the same way she did- plus the same spot the signed them HOUCE OF PAIN kids. |
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IP: E2EE 59B6
HEY! I shop at K mart! well until they closed down. lol it was kinda ghetto in there wasn't it? oh wel nice peice. OoNnEe
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IP: 1769 3B0F
uppin
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IP: 6656 186F
OOOPS UPPIN
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IP: E2EE 59B6
I'm up this shit! People need to wuit sleeping on my lil hommie!
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IP: 1769 3B0F
THANK YOU MAMI I APPRECIATE THAT
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.-.Marxism.-.
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IP: 4B2D 6E5A
lmao i wish the block came back.... just playin
![]() i wasnt feelin this... you need to work on structure... some of ya bars are mad stretched and then the others are mad short... anyways thats my 2 cents.. keep rhymin and return the favor! |
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IP: C3D0 66BD
man that shit was nice to read....nice job dunny...and yo everytimei try sendin you a pm your shits to filled up namsayin so pm me so you Atetrack and my self can collab on some shit namsayin...wahid
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IP: 1769 3B0F
mine isnt full
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IP: 1769 3B0F
UPPIN
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IP: 3F03 EF03
u got vocab to a certain extent..some multies i guess...u need to up them two things....your bars are too long or too short even them out more for a better flow cos this didnt flow
keep elevating |
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IP: 6656 186F
i spit them easy to beats maybe i just havnt caught the jist of posting them in that manner
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IP: 2D3B 131F
blah, not great....
your flow was choppy, you put hyphens where there was no multis, your vocab and structure was basic and the content was unoriginal. this isnt hate, this is my view...for a standard rock the mic verse this was ok, nothing better, but for real people need to elevate past levels like this |
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IP: 1769 3B0F
twin englan must not have shit if that what you thinkin or your ass might not just how to flow
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IP: 1769 3B0F
my bust though i do respect your critique and will try to improve my bust im just edgey cause i find my rhythm multi's so easy yet it doesnt seam cats is reading
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