Heres the real thread.. fucked up other one
Heres the rules:
2 ROUNDS, SO VOTERS WAIT TILL BOTH ARE DONE,
15-20 Lines
No hate or DR votes
You spit first
If you win ill try get you in Illegal Krew........
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Besta Luck
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Don't vote until both rounds are done.....

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i'll hit this battle afta ya'll spit

but for now check out my shit
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=59894

Yo, speed racer, 97' burgundy Blazer
Wanted for burglary, had to ditch the mercury tracer
I'm on some low ish,
I'm fed up wit the being broke ish
I'm not to joke wit
Bitch, I don't sell crack, I smoke it
My brains dusted; I'm disgusted at all my habits
Too many asprin tablets and empty medicine cabinets
Loosing battles to wack rappers 'cause I'm always too blunted
Walkin' up in the cypher smokin', talkin' like, "Who want it?"
Thug and crook; every drug in the book I've done it
My 9's at your frame,is that your chain? Run it
Who wants to die of an overdose of excessive flavor?
Aggressive nature got me stickin' you for your Progressive pager
Spectacular, battle rap manufacturer
Stole your mom's Acura, wrecked it, then sold it back to her

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Checkin' in for my first round drop.....
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Alright drop but next round, make ya ;lines a bit longer....
Check It...

casle00 gonna destroy this newbe
but yo check out my battle
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=59894

C'mon dawg you want me to compete, your lyrics are lackin punches//
No personals, i don't even have to duck, cause im untouchable, like acid lunches//
Couldn't beat me if i handed this win to you with a certificate of appreciation//
Cause your ass is so retarded, like drunk bum at the train station//
Ill shit on you, D-12 stylz, just to show how much you worth//
Claimin' to be hard, but the hardest time you been through was birth//
Murderin you, and stabbin you, multiples stab woudns to the head and brains//
Multiple blood and organs stains, covering window pains, cause my shit go against the grain//
Ill spit these lyrics to you, right in your face cause you a shitbag n i dun like you//
Fuck narkotics, jus' my lyrikal tone in your brain will spike you//
Jabbin and hookin' as my lyikal punches hit you all over and inflict damage//
Then send ya home, shittin ya daks, and they charged you for extra baggage//
You could try to beat me but to you dawg, thats impossible to do//
You couldn't have good taste if i fed my words to you, in a stew//
So take your banana and vaseline cause i don't want in on your gay idea of fun//
Cause you neveer gonna shine, like if the moon ruled over the sun//

Round 2 dawg spit ya 2nd verse....

lol white..... hes a mate of mine..... new so he said he wanted 2 verse me.... so yea.... anywayz waitin for your verse shep.....
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you think u got all the bitches for sayin dat u give me twitches/ u start to cry even when u see my fuken pictures/i'll make you die by a chinese burn/ and yet u still wont learn/ so i pass it to someone else cause its there turn to shine and beat u wid my own rhyme/ it may be cheatin but i say it aint a crime/fuk it i am gion to represent a new line ...opponents like u go to shows and get a broken nose man you fold my clothes like wen I freeze I mark emcees I kill beasts like heart desease man please get down on your knees and plead for your life I sacrifice you twice man in ur after life u’ll be a dike who cant fight in broad day light cause ur too white, wen i beat u you'll be swept away by my hype, i can transfer you into a dead man cause i know ur type, i can get you off me from one single wipe, i neva said anything about bananas and vaseline/ dat must be ur idea.. u must be tooo fuken kean/hey man i'll crack ur spleen/ wipe the blood with mr sheen/ it aint my problem it's jus ppl call me mr mean machine/ ur using d-12 to beat my ass/ the next time u ask for a battle i think i'll jus pass/ cause u goin too slow and i'm moving to fast/ so wateva u say is wat u are(lol) so make it good/ if not u'll have to move to another fuken hood

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wat yall think bout my rhyme

jus write bak now but DONT VOTE......

jus write to tell me wat ya think sbout it

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ok ok.... now ill put a lil thought into this verse lol.... make suren you explain your evrse n give advice and reasons......
Checkin' in for second verse,******************
RIP Shepney...lol

(Tryin' a new style)
*Picks up mic, pisses on Shepney*
Yo, check it 1,2...

..::Startin' this::..
Now look shep, ill stab ya and kill ya, cause im tha hardest, my lyrics couldn't be any realer//
When i spit its like a image in your brain, predicting the future, im psychotic rippin you faggets, like a serial killer//
Your whole verse was pathetic, cause you "fed" so much off my verse, you should already be a heavyweight//
I'm wasting my time with this newb, cause you beatin me is not gonna happen, like a terrorst runnin' late//
I'll shove your head up your ass so you can see how shit you really are//
Then make you eat it, then spit it, and thats the defintion of what your lyrics really are//

..::Stabbin'::..
Its gettin serious, my punches leavin you delirious, cause your gettin' snapped up like a rabbit in a trap, cause ur too curious//
Wanna be in illegal, but the only thing illegal bout you is your ugly facial features//
Smash up your skull with no mercy, cause your nuthin' but a ugly creature//
I'll rape your sister and your mother, jus' to show you that im not kidding//
Must be fucked up thinkin you could win gainst me, have you sayin' "Sorry Castle i was trippin'"//
No more excuses, im a leave you in bruises, sparkin up like hot fuses, more confident than pissed boozers//
I'm leavin you in a alley with ya brains leakin', guts spillin', prayin to god, cause ya legs got no feelin'//

..::Rest. In. Piss.::...
Your wins a 0 and so are ya losses, so thats the chance you got of winning//
This ain't jus battlin' so stop your stupid grinning//
Claimin' your zany, but man jerkin off dogs ain't sinning//
So give up this rap shit, cause your shit, form a group with elton john, and suck dick together while singing//

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^^^Uppin for votes peepz^^^
We'll come vote on your shit
Give good reasons
^^^Uppin for votes peepz^^^
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castle00 took this out. was a fair effort by zany for his first go however it lacked any real flow and the stucture wasnt great. castle00 came with harder punches which zany lacked.
vote- castle00

Yea... shep structure your verses better like how i did, or do what other mc's do.........and more eprsonal punches.....
Uppin' for more votes
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