some might like t some may not

Yo, all you keep your mouth shut
Unless yall wanna get fucked up
Ill Tighten your tounge with bolts and nuts
Lightin your lung by pourin flame on your cuts
Ill Whightin your teeth cuz you take my cum shots
I keep thinkin these strong thoughts
remember be dead soon enough
Go ahead just piss me off
Choke on my dick and cough
While I stand back and start laughin
All I wanna do is take you and start slappin
Go home write and start rappin
And still no one caught me
Bitch stop spittin shit at me
Can believe no one shot me
Turn spit on your face as the cop cuffs me
(Cuz I)
Scorched your body like a damn nazi
Bitch don’t smile or even touch me
Im back, guess the cops lost me
Yeah kenna get the fuck off me
Ill strangle you with rusted red wires
This is the time your life just fuckin expires
The only time I reveal my fuckin desires
Its time that I finish you
Cuz none will miss you

come on i watnt to know what all yall think

ugh i really should have this saved in notepad...
1. self promotion is played out to the greatest extent ever...
2. being gangsta is also the same as above
3. save this stuff for your battles
4. try to spit on a topic such as death, life or whatever you may choose
5. hit my shit up!

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=41944

yer same as inspire said,if you gona do gangsta make sure its dope,coz you aint gonna be getting no love from me for gangsta,but if this was turned into a battle then maybe youd have me,some shit was mad funny throughout...
i have to go ride a dolphin coz i heard this song,and riding a dolphin will take me back to my brothers in reality,i have to ride the dolphins....end quote....
aiight whatever i spaced out major jsut then for get that haha

you need to make your lines longer and better wordplay

rb isnt a place fo online gangstas
u need ta elivate
u need ta get yo lines longa
its ok to be wack espefcially with a name like G-2wice

this was god awfull....keep ya shit real n deep..u aint no gangsta so dont rap like one..vocab needs uppin big time and u need multies...also make ya lines longer