Never step out side I'd get eating alive//
Im not scared but every time they see me they deprive me//
I want to beat the shit out of them but theres to many//
I sit and listen to my rap beats and I vibe//
Release all my anger with a pen to a page//
It like I build up my rage at such a young age//
My mother is worried that I will be killed by the streets//
I turn to achohol and illegal and non illegal drugs//
Move out of my home and live with the thugs//
The ones who deprive me before do it no more//
Ive over come my problem they will hurt me no more//
Got a daughter at four and her dad is 24//
She runs the block everyday with the same clothes on her back//
Her skin is have white have black//
What goin on in her mind when her mum sells crack//
Ive tryed to stay clean but I always get put of track//
I should have stayed at home and tryed to rap//
At least thats something that I was good at//
Instead im here with a boyfriend that talks so much crap//
Even in front of the kid he gave me a slap//



Just a beginning needs work

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yo this is 1 of th first pieces by u that i've felt that was pretty dope, but simple vocab used

hit my shit up its called "Remaining Unrecognized Part 1"
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...8513#post398513

if u gotz a daughter why aint u talk bout her befo'.....i kinda think dat shit is a lie....????? i dont kno, but i almost felt u on dat one keep workin on it, lik was said befo' u gotz 2 evaluate da vocab, and wordplay, its from da heart but its to simple....peace out...

this was overall good, it is a lot better than all of the other stuff u done

this drop is ur first tight drop on RB , , , tight shit dawg , , i was feelin it , ,, yo soilder give her some props dawg

aight i guess im too hard on u.....nice drop.....

nice drop but i agree w/solider a lil bit.Sum of dat sh!t seems unrealstic but u still did alot betta than tha last pieces.Stay ^
-Avi

she doesnt have no daughter she's 14




yo hit my shit up its called "Remaning Unrecognized Part 2 n part 3"
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=43639

[QUOTE]Originally posted by tRiLL
[B]she doesnt have no daughter she's 14

hahahahahahahhahahahahahahahahahhahahahhahahahahah ahahahahhahahahhahahahahhahaha . . so let me see , , she's 14 and her son is 7 ,, , , so she had her son at da age of 7 , , hahahahahahahahhahaha