You will accept me as one.. Not 2,3 or 4.
As soon as I hit the door you’ll be wanting more.
More potential, more of what you need.
You’ll hunger like a horse with no feed.
I have a desire you cant afford a lust you’ll never understand.
I hold my life in the palm of my hand.
I’m praying for relief I’m wishing for existence.
But I know all dreams disappear in an instance.
Come take me away from all the problems, away from my mind.
Wake me up from the nightmare inside.
Save me from the evil I have created this millennium.
When hate consumes, nothing can be done.
We all live a lie at some point in time.
I need to be taken away from mine.
Save me from the dark the closure that wont come
Commit me to insanity for all the things I've done
Forgive me for my crimes and time unspent
let blood run through my body so I can repent
bless the ignorance so intellect may show
let the consumption of death let go
rain falls beneath the sorrow of life
make this the only sacrafise
down the epidemic that falls beneath my wings
carry upon your shoulders the angel that sings
At the mercy of your behalf save me from what I've become
A lifeless soul with nothing of presidence done

that wasnt that good at start, but u finished off nicely,
"bless the ignorance so intellect may show
let the consumption of death let go
rain falls beneath the sorrow of life
make this the only sacrafise
down the epidemic that falls beneath my wings
carry upon your shoulders the angel that sings
At the mercy of your behalf save me from what I've become
A lifeless soul with nothing of presidence done"
that bit i liked best

I disagree with ol' boi up there about it not startin'
off right...but uh to each it's own....Anyway the piece
was unique I liked ya delivery the way it stared off numb-like
and then went into the emotional part, very nice
concept ya know, I also liked ya vocab in this it was used
very strongly.....enuff of the bullshyt tho'
keep doin whatcha do mi'ha
*~Holler~*

that was a good way to finish the story from the last one and i love the endeing


O-G

thank you for the replies..very appreciated since people sleep to damn much these days. OoNnEe

^^

tight drop dawg , , i was feelin it

why thank you...if I only I could wake up the rest of the world! lol...

Preet nice yo

damn....i aint care wat da peeps sayin u riped it again, every damn time u drop sum tight shit, peace gurl.....and much RESPECT

thank you and thanks to everyone who didn't sleep!

Hmm.. I have to respond to this or Angelic is "going to start being a meanie" to me.. SO.. I thought it was good. You know that you can write.. I don't understand why you are so concerned with feedback. Just keep doing your own thing.

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