Yo this is my 3rd go at a decent spit G, my other 2 efforts are shit i wanna delete them so bad dawg.
My last one was whacked bad by bash, but yo i drew from dis and come up wid dis wayu think?


Ay yo read dis slow, let it flow

Yo cheak it/
Yo bash you no much about the rap game?/
No? well look, stay, read and listen/
Yo bash i read yo shit/
Dude i think yo a master of this shit/
Some of yo shit is real dope/
and the rest deserves to be played to da pope "u hope"/
But a hold up a min bro/
U aint the pope atlest thats what i hope/
Rap for me is about hope/
I dont beleive u have to be nesserserily dope/
I aint dope or good/
But yo when i grab a M-I-C n start to spite it/
I aint living in hell no more/
I aint gotta come home too no whore "hitting my head on da door"/
My lyrics aint clever/
but hey i still persevere n try too endeavour/
My shit is for me/
If others dont relate and like it, i dont care/
But too go around dissing/
Just aint fair/
Dude when ur dissing u just missing/
I dont got a gun/
Neither has my hood/
But who gives a fuck whigga/
Least i aint gotta run from da gun/
means i can just have fun/
HAHA/
I aint trying to preach/
hell i dont wanna teach/
But dis game is about "FREEDOM OF SPEECH"/
Not for yo to go round and linch/
I got a style/
U may find it vile/
what whatever tho go lay me a pile "of shit"/
Yo we all apart of da same COMMUNITY/
What da fuck gives you "IMUNITY"/
I bet yo only just reached "PUBITY"/
And while i got dis M-I-C lemme say what the fuck is whack?/
Yo u mean bush whack right/
Oh no u mean my flow wacked/
Hell u proberly think i should pack "go home"/
But fuck dat, I spite for me not you/
Im open to comments/
Like dawg! try this try that/
Or even like dis like dat/
But hey I cant take yo CRAP/
So stick ur face in my LAP "ur turn to blow"/
So who gives a fuck if im whack/
Yo lets go back down da track/
Didnt i advise yo not TOO/
Hell u ainty got TOO/
Shit whigga its better not TOO/
So yo now im done, ima go hit um up in KINGDOM KONG "ur dumb"/
Word/
Much luv playa's, I gotta go say my preyers/
I hope to fuck they get anserd/
I suppose i gotta go learn to be a playa "not a preyer"/
So yo I hope you no, I rap for pleasure, not FAME, Shit that'd just be LAME/
oh.

Well my bruva's n sister's is dit da shit or no?
Bash i aint hating u bruv i just drew from yo dissing.
I hope you like it.

i got u dawg , , , , i'm a spit back at u soon

yea fosure, but ay is dis better or what?

Whack , , dawg u need better lyrics , , ur lyrics are too simple dawg

its ma style G, i aint a hater, i aint any playa G i just spit cus i luv it, go figure g

Sorry dog but bash is right. way too simple

ight im sick a dis simple shit/
yall think rap is da same/
man ur melody's are tame ima fuck up yo game/
yall say im whack but what da fuck im back/
ima keep rymin, ima keep it simple/
yo all da best rappers shout KEEP IT SIMPLE/
can they all be wrong, gee ur shits to long/
make rap for da people, and keep it simple/
i might be pimple on yo dick, i might not be dope like yall are/
but who gives a fuck/
ima trying hard, spitting from my heart/
keeping it real maybe abit sereal/
i make my shit for the people, not just for hard ass foes/
ill battle anyone yall, i may loose/
but i aint tightanin dis noose/
ill be back wid a rap again and again/
ima keep having a crack whilst yall smoking crack/
i dont give a fuck if u dont like it/
ima new whigga on da block/
my shit you aint going to lock/
dis hear is only my 4th melody, i been dissed on um all, by yall/
spitting dont need to be complicated or over rated/
ima keep trying my best, writing more mulling it in my head/
one day i know ill get it/
one day i now ill get the props i deserve/
my sheer effort and work ethic is incredible/
un-describibal incredible, i dont wanna be famouse/
i dont wanna be a rapstar gangsta/
im just follewing my passion in my own fasion/
i aint leeching or copying im origanal/
i do listen to my heroes flow/
and thats why i keep it simple.

^^^no comment , , dawg if u dont elevate then peeps wont read ur shit ,, , cause we tired of tellin u too elevate ,, and u never do it

explain dawg elivate my lyrics? u mean tighten my flow and make it less simple again

jus evaluate ya vocab, needs work...peace

your vocab, wordplay, similes, every aspect of a good rhyme.. you don't have it.. say'n my shit's a'ight.. dawg, compared to this mine is like platinum.. lol..

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