( walks into a church quietly late at night, after being kicked out of his own house and into the rain, the sounds of preiests singing echo through the walls, kneels down at the alter bringing out a piece of paper and a pen......)

Dear God,

heavenly o father, take my hand in dis struggle 4 freedom/
help me walk the stairs to the thorone of your kingdom/
understand u and my friends are da only ones keepin me alive/
if it wasnt for you, i'd a killed myself when my life took its dive/
but now i have some confesions to make, name my mistakes/
a yo my life is like a movie, now its time to film da second take/
neva gave a fuck, had problems, my last worries were my grades/
i was so damn stupid father, was tricked by da tricks of da trade/
i drowned my self in my sorrow, hid my self in empty bottles/
looked up to da wrong people,shoulda made Jesus my role model/
i slammed my foot on da petal, but i refused to go full throutul/
please have mercy on me Lord, please forgive me of my sins/
relive me of da hatred in my heart, take da anger out from within/
u took my uncle jeff who loved me,he was my last line of defense/
i was doin fine on da fence, since he died its been more intense/
years have pased, i have neva forgotten the man he was/
he took me in like a son, he still lives within in me, yes he does/
give me da strength to carry on in da world, let me proceed/
and forgive all these buisness men, whos life is full of greed/
let me live in pain no more, pick me up when i start to bleed/
and let diffrent races help each other not push each in da mud/
let them realize that we all share the same color of blood/
now put ur hand upon my forehead, blees my new heart/
give me anotha chance dear father, give me a fresh start.......

( stands up, crosses himself, and walks out the doors to go home and tell his mother hes now a man......)

waitin fo' sum replies.....

Good man .. i liked it ... about the same rate as your other one .. which was bloody good

this was nice, i really connected with this. what was also good was that it was more of a pesonal rap wich i like b/c it is jst the MC's thoughts and personal beliefs.
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uppin

Tight shit Fam ,,,4 sho

This shit is ill...I like the topic a lot...You got so tight shit fo sho man...Keep spittin....


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Ill spit..... you had some real nice lines in there.... the only thing i didnt like was that the topic of "startin over" and "askin fo forgiveness" are semi played topics..... but its your thoughts and feelins so im not one to say your thoughts are wrong.... im feelin it....i especially liked the begginin... you came on strong...good spit... keep it comin...

uppin, ill mak sur ta return da fava to everyone dat hit me back, peace out....much love

quit sleepin on dis shit

that was some for real touching shit.. Its nice to see someone post this kind of "unmanly" stuff.. greatness.. and if you ever leave B.R.E holla at me in The Hit Parade.. I'd like to collab sometime also. OoNnEe

hot verse man.Ya had a good idea behind and intro/outro wit tha setup and all.Reminded me of sum Nas type stuff but it wuz ill.Stay ^
-Avi

uppin yall, and angelicsheshe even though im in B.R.E. ill still colab wit u , peace eazy and much love.......

quit sleepin....

still waitin....