My heart pounds with every breath i take,
i get so nervious about the choices i make/
I can look at you and feel admiration,
cuddle and kiss you with no hesitation/
I am apart of you and you apart of me,
there is that *spark* what we call chemistry/
I can trust you with my heart and my life,
i dont need no ring to be as caring as a wife/
You got me on track put me in your wings,
caried me through the tough times .............
showing me what love can bring/
With just a simple smile or to hold my hand.
made me feel my wounds to my heart can mend,
eternal happiness brought by one man/
Thought love was a game and the rules made to be broken,
till god sent you to me with only one chance so i took the token,
to a ride with the chance of love one journey i must take/
No-one ever pushed this - a love so perfectly matched,
so people wait there whole like to get a good catch/
But soon you go but i`ll grow much stronger,
each day your gone my heart will grown fonder/
I`ll stand in the same spot tears flowing into the sea,
blowing you a kiss hoping you get it and send on back to me//

Just kinda emotional ... long story ... hope yall thought it
was ok, i been gone fo` ages ... SUPZ YALL????

HoLLa

WuN

This was a wonderful and lovely poem and all, but there was one small problem.

I'm not a sailor, and I'm not a boy. You'd think someone who wrote all that on how much she loved me would know me a bit better.

Or... maybe it's not about me.

Again, a wonderful and lovely peice. And don't worry, everyone has been gone for ages since the place crashed.

Mo-mentai.

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

As usual...a very nice piece...

....title is interesting...and adds that personal touch to the piece..as it seems more like it's coming from your perspective, your eyes...

...had a smoothish flow, even though i think it did rely at times a bit too much on rhyme, disrupting the flow a bit when it would've maybe been better just to go off and onto the edge...but still, nice, with emotions shown well...


liked it...respect...