i need to know how yall feel about this this took not even 5 mins this is my emotions and shit put into this tell me what yall think but please not negetivity pease thanx

lif fuckin sucks wunce everywuns against you,
peeps say the wrong shit on purpose to offend you//
but what do you do when you cant take anymore,
i flip the script do somethin im gonna regret cause that what hates for//
cause right bout now this what im filled with,
its like i just got put into a box of bullshit and concelled in//
i tossin down the gun try to live my life woth out it,
will i ever be the same as before i doubt it//
me nad my girl just got into it bad,
everything thing she told she asked me not to get mad//
she said i was controlling and i admit it i was,
wish my life wouldnt be like a tv with no channel clear not fuzz//
but i think what i destined to be and hopfully its a good person,
but ill get back to you on that cause i got a lot of shit to learnin//

nice drop, was feelin this most fo thje way the through!

Well... I liked it alright,,,, It's cool you were expressing yourself etc.,,, Some parts really did'nt flow to well....
"but what do you do when you cant take anymore,
i flip the script do somethin im gonna regret cause that what hates for//"
I'm not saying count syllables.... But read this aloud to yourself... It dose'nt flow... Good subject matter tho.